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Hey - will rest on this story for a while. My new focus is my new Danmachi Fanfic. Because I got interested in the manga. What can we do? My wife is sucker for adventurer stories. Though I plan on making it a bit unique and ultra realistic:)

Again see you again in Minus!

Aww, I just started to enjoy binging this fanfiction recently. I guess I'll check your Danmachi fanfiction, hopefully with a similar badass female protagonist as well!

It's weird that there aren't many readers here, maybe because you put this in SFW?

Maybe you should consider moving it to NSFW, not to add lewd or anything, but to hopefully get more readers. It's still technically NSFW after all with the mature topics of violence and statemanship!
 
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I have shown it in the first chapter. Show don't tell of Cell and Gohan Images on her mind.

I was confused why you replied this since I didn't mention anything close to it. But then I saw what I quoted.

I was just quoting a part of the chapter to show which one hasn't been threadmarked. I see that you still haven't. Readers might miss it if they're using the reading mode where it skips non threadmarked posts and etc. The chapter basically skips from The Speech to The Assistant, if you use the arrows from threadmark. Skipping that chapter I mentioned where she explained her governance plan to the three former chieftains.

Threadmarking is basically the thing that gives it the arrow keys to the next and previous chapters and adding it to the threadmark list.
 
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"You're getting scary, brat," she said.. "If you don't have a tail - I thought you're not one of us."
If you didn't have a tail - I'd think you weren't one of us.*
Unless that was intentional since saiyans aren't educated.
I landed lightly behind him, feet pressing into the ash-covered dirt. My presence barely made a sound, but his tail flicked - his body tensed.

"What happened here?"

His breath hitched. Then, in a single instant, his expression twisted.

Anger. Not the distant, simmering kind - the immediate, visceral kind. The kind that surged hot and raw, that demanded an outlet.

His fists clenched, shoulders snapping taut as his tail bristled behind him.

"What do you mean, 'blasts'?" I had barely finished the question before he moved
.

His step forward wasn't an attack, but it carried the weight of one - sharp, deliberate. "You're serious." His voice had dropped, rough and edged with disbelief. "You don't know?"
When did Beets give her an answer? He literally didn't speak and she asks "What do you mean 'blasts?'"
You forgot a line there, dude.
Most likely female. Or gender neutral. Idk yet but the focus of this story is psychological, combat mechanic and kingdom building. Beets just freaking hots for the MC due to her extreme precise body structure.

Also keep in mind. Our MC is mentally a man. He had a daughter and wife in his past life and trying to make amends for it.
Rip. I was hoping for a straight MC. There are only two genders, male and female.
He may have been a man before, but he's a woman now. So she should get through that understanding and character arc and just get a husband. Otherwise, why SI into Gine? A woman? You'd have been better off as just going with a whole OC instead at that point. Or just become celibate I guess. Was hoping to see Gine running around with kids in the future. Her own genetic offspring, rather than adoptions, I mean.

But if she just wants to be gay? Well, I guess that's fine too I guess.
You forgot to threadmark this chapter. I assume it is "The Grand Reset?"

(Comment for The Speech chapter)
But man, Fasha is gonna freak she caused all that considering she proved to Gine that Saiyans were completely unreasonable. XD
So she now she forces them to be reasonable. If not for Fasha's fuckup, Gine might have just fucked off by now. 🤣
Wonder how Beets feels now that he found out his crush was actually the Emerald Calamity? Must've been a hell of a gut punch, though I hope he gets better. I like your characterization for him, its really making me root for him man. 😁

Anyways, Imma get back to reading. But I will say this: This is an amazing story so far, even if I dislike the Logic thing. But now I'm imagining she's gonna make a Viltrumite-like Empire out of the Saiyans, but with a human twist on it. Hopefully the woman gets some damn emotions put into her. Even Ultron and Jarvis have more emotions than her and they're literal AI/robots. It says a lot when even robotic beings have more emotion than whatever she is. Smh.

Still a top-tier story though, despite going against the grain.

Edit: btw do you have a full image for the cover pic? Cuz Gine looks amazing in it. x3

Edit 2 (Finally caught up to latest chapter):
Power level Reference:

Nion, Scientist, Administrator, Personal Assistant - 45 000
Nion is hot~ And she's making good progress. I wonder what level the three Eminents are at now after a whole year with some training aid from Gine? Cuz from the sounds of things in earlier comments, you had her teach 4 Star and above after they had proven their loyalty, teaching them even Ki Sense as a privilege that the lower rankers are unaware of.

Nion exhaled through her nose, fingers tightening around the porcelain cup. Warmth against skin, warmth against bone, warmth against thought. She set it down, the soft clink lost beneath the hum of machines embedded in the walls.

"Go in."

The door slid open before she could answer.
Come in*

Yet those golden eyes – those onyx eyes –
Are they gold or black??
The Devil: 10 000 000 000 (Saiyan of Legend + Post Zenkai)
Lord Cooler: 6 500 000 (Fourth Form)
The woman: 160 000 (Base Form)
10 billion!? Jesus christ Almighty! Broly is terrifying! 😱

As for Cooler..that's when he's in his relaxed state (you forgot to add "Heavily Suppressed"), I see. His full power in base must be, at minimum, 80million, with his fifth form likely taking him up anywhere between 300 million and 800 million. Gine is gonna have a super hard time catching because the humongous gap is bigger than any other compared to her past battles. Man, I can't wait to see how much more powerful she becomes from this! It'd be an instant loss for her if Cooler just decided to stay in space and Supernova the planet like Frieza. But its Cooler, he will like to prove himself superior to his brother so he'll look for the "super saiyan" and try to take them out as "casually" as he can to prove his "superiority" before finding out he needs to fight harder because of his inferiority complex to his little brother.

As for Gine, I see she only managed to increase her BP (battlepower) by 10,000 after a year.

If you read during Kesha Village Arc - Broly was introduced - crashing down in South Galaxy. He kinda goes back in time after being defeated by Goku
Hmm, I wonder if the Time Patrol will get involved? If they're even around, that is. Or if this is just a DB Multiverse thing where he didn't only go back in time, but to another universe entirely?

Where the hell did Beets and Fasha go though? They completely disappeared after 'The Speech.'
Hmm...
Hey - will rest on this story for a while. My new focus is my new fic. Tensura annd Danmachi.

Again see you again in Minus!
When will you return to this story? Because it is absolutely amazing! 😟
Should I? Kinda hassle haha. I thought NSFW are for those smut centric stories.
i'd agree with the guy getting it moved over. Just contact a mod and they'll do it for you.
I only found this story cuz I saw your Aiz Wallenstein (not) SI was on this site in the nsfw section and quickly checked if you had other stories. I was surprised there was even a Gine SI. Absolutely loved it. I would recommend adding it in the Story Title and Tags that this is an "AU" though.
 
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If you didn't have a tail - I'd think you weren't one of us.*
Unless that was intentional since saiyans aren't educated.

When did Beets give her an answer? He literally didn't speak and she asks "What do you mean 'blasts?'"
You forgot a line there, dude.

Rip. I was hoping for a straight MC. There are only two genders, male and female.
He may have been a man before, but he's a woman now. So she should get through that understanding and character arc and just get a husband. Otherwise, why SI into Gine? A woman? You'd have been better off as just going with a whole OC instead at that point. Or just become celibate I guess. Was hoping to see Gine running around with kids in the future. Her own genetic offspring, rather than adoptions, I mean.

But if she just wants to be gay? Well, I guess that's fine too I guess.

You forgot to threadmark this chapter. I assume it is "The Grand Reset?"

(Comment for The Speech chapter)
But man, Fasha is gonna freak she caused all that considering she proved to Gine that Saiyans were completely unreasonable. XD
So she now she forces them to be reasonable. If not for Fasha's fuckup, Gine might have just fucked off by now. 🤣
Wonder how Beets feels now that he found out his crush was actually the Emerald Calamity? Must've been a hell of a gut punch, though I hope he gets better. I like your characterization for him, its really making me root for him man. 😁

Anyways, Imma get back to reading. But I will say this: This is an amazing story so far, even if I dislike the Logic thing. But now I'm imagining she's gonna make a Viltrumite-like Empire out of the Saiyans, but with a human twist on it. Hopefully the woman gets some damn emotions put into her. Even Ultron and Jarvis have more emotions than her and they're literal AI/robots. It says a lot when even robotic beings have more emotion than whatever she is. Smh.

Still a top-tier story though, despite going against the grain.

Edit: btw do you have a full image for the cover pic? Cuz Gine looks amazing in it. x3

Edit 2 (Finally caught up to latest chapter):

Nion is hot~ And she's making good progress. I wonder what level the three Eminents are at now after a whole year with some training aid from Gine? Cuz from the sounds of things in earlier comments, you had her teach 4 Star and above after they had proven their loyalty, teaching them even Ki Sense as a privilege that the lower rankers are unaware of.


Come in*


Are they gold or black??

10 billion!? Jesus christ Almighty! Broly is terrifying! 😱

As for Cooler..that's when he's in his relaxed state (you forgot to add "Heavily Suppressed"), I see. His full power in base must be, at minimum, 80million, with his fifth form likely taking him up anywhere between 300 million and 800 million. Gine is gonna have a super hard time catching because the humongous gap is bigger than any other compared to her past battles. Man, I can't wait to see how much more powerful she becomes from this! It'd be an instant loss for her if Cooler just decided to stay in space and Supernova the planet like Frieza. But its Cooler, he will like to prove himself superior to his brother so he'll look for the "super saiyan" and try to take them out as "casually" as he can to prove his "superiority" before finding out he needs to fight harder because of his inferiority complex to his little brother.

As for Gine, I see she only managed to increase her BP (battlepower) by 10,000 after a year.


Hmm, I wonder if the Time Patrol will get involved? If they're even around, that is. Or if this is just a DB Multiverse thing where he didn't only go back in time, but to another universe entirely?

Where the hell did Beets and Fasha go though? They completely disappeared after 'The Speech.'
Hmm...

When will you return to this story? Because it is absolutely amazing! 😟

i'd agree with the guy getting it moved over. Just contact a mod and they'll do it for you.
I only found this story cuz I saw your Aiz Wallenstein (not) SI was on this site in the nsfw section and quickly checked if you had other stories. I was surprised there was even a Gine SI. Absolutely loved it. I would recommend adding it in the Story Title and Tags that this is an "AU" though.


Thanks for your review man. Your points are all valid. I only work during my free time whenever I have some motivation. I usually finish a chapter in one sitting - so I the quality isn't perfect.

Gine has emotion though. However it's in the weird spectrum.

The version of this story in Spcbattle is much better for a bit because I'm editing it more on that site due to higher engagement.

The Aiz Wallenstein SI and this Story is currently on Hiatus. My newest fic is my focus because I feel fulfilled working on that in the moment.
 
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