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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. NightmareWarden

    NightmareWarden Versed in the lewd.

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    I just wish The Team had to deal with Truggs’ antics rather than Paul. He’s competent enough to escape them if Paul is working elsewhere.
     
  2. transhumansage

    transhumansage Versed in the lewd.

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    source please? is it not easier to put the name on imgbb?
     
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  3. Khornelius

    Khornelius Overlord of the Underworld

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    Nylor Truggs

    He’s a villain I love to hate.
     
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  4. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
    Good news! She's not a zombie.
    The picture is taken from Countdown: Arena. Red Son Superman and another version of Superman start fighting and a version of Chris Kent does that.
    Superman issue 666. She's in about two panels.
    No. Sources vanish from the internet all the time. I want my images stored somewhere.
     
  5. RichardWhereat

    RichardWhereat Aia airëa Fëanáro.

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    Honestly, that's why I like him.
     
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  6. dxdragon

    dxdragon Experienced.

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    Huh. Zoat just got me lost on a wiki Dive for like 10 minutes lol.
    Sounds like an very interesting figure. Was able to talk himself out of Death penalty and was left to live in peace inside the nation he was at war against. After leading a Guerilla War against them for 10 years.

    Man had A++ Charisma lol
     
  7. mossconfig

    mossconfig any "Gregor the Overlander" fans?

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    Supergirls. Gotta catch em all!
     
  8. PrinceJonathan

    PrinceJonathan Versed in the lewd.

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    Wait, does Nylor have his own harem of Supergirls?

    Anyone else picturing him and Paul passing them around like children's trading cards?
     
  9. Bud-E

    Bud-E Stand up so I can push you down!

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    This is good and I really like Paul's interactions with Nylor, but why didn't Paul just put him in jail the moment he had him captured and all his tech confiscated?
     
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  10. Finagle007

    Finagle007 [Verified Great Old One]

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    The zombie-like Supergirl is from Superman 666, where Rakkar the Nothing, Last Demon of Krypton's Hell, tried to turn Supes into the Beast of Revelations via a corruptive dream. Except Supes' friends saw it coming and Supes tore the demon apart.

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  11. Pinklestia

    Pinklestia Well worn.

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    Look he is a villain with good ideas and poor execution... That's not rare in DC.

    Unfortunately humanity tends to be reactive not pro active, if DC humans actually had USED the tech they had, the Reach would have lost.

    POWER RINGS EQUIVALENTS MADE IN THE FORTIES DAMMIT!

    It doesn't matter the Gravity Rod/Star Rod is inferior to a power ring, give enough of the population one of those and with that alone the Reach would had a hard time. And that's just ONE FREAKING INVENTION, THERE IS A LOT MORE!
     
  12. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Because if anything explodes it will take him with it.
     
  13. Mastigos2

    Mastigos2 Versed in the lewd.

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    And for extra fun zombies probably aren't the best choice against angelic Thaumauturgy
     
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  14. Sojiko

    Sojiko Getting sticky.

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    I normally wouldn't respond to a post so old unless I had something meaningful to contribute, but this scene was just too good for me to merely leave a Like as a sign of my approval and gratitude.

    This was great, thanks, Zoat!
     
  15. Threadmarks: Future Tense (part 14)
    Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    13th September 2012
    09:36 GMT -5


    Angelika hurtles back through the room-

    "No mark!"

    -but recovers in the air, planting her feet on the far wall as the zombie flies at her.

    "There's a planet full of people without House El tattoos out there, Nylor."

    "Ah, yeah. Want to know-?"

    I fire a construct into his neck, burning through enough of his spinal cord that even his regenerative abilities should struggle to restore his mobility anytime soon. Next I cut off his hands and feet and gouge out his eyes.

    "No."

    Fire ripples over Noriel as she pulls herself off the ground, and zombie Supergirl gets smacked out of the air as New Kara uses a medical cylinder like a baseball bat! I spend a fraction of a second cursing that I haven't had time to explain why that sort of thing is inefficient in super strength combat even as I form a kryptonite ray, then track and fire.

    The golden beam hits zombie Supergirl in the left leg, and… Does nothing but get her shield!

    My kinetic barrier judders and glitches on the first punch-

    "Worship him!"

    -resulting in her physically pulling the barrier apart with red-glowing fingernails. I'm forming a railgun construct as she pounds on my construct armour, her arms blurring to the point that even accelerated I can't see them as distinct objects. Come on come on! Construct done load-

    My armour construct shatters and her next punch hits my power armour directly!

    -mage slayer point and fire!

    "RaGH!"

    As she staggers back I see that the shot hit her in the chest, blasting off her halter top and revealing more angry red lines cut into the skin beneath.

    "I smell a demon!"

    Golden fire blazes over zombie Supergirl, and me, and Truggs. It… Agh, stings, my spell eater overheating and returning to subspace immediately while I feel hands, feet and eyes burning, the pain unmitigated by my rings!

    "YAAAAAGH!"

    I collapse in my armour as the pain recedes, my-. Yes, everything still there, apparently the Source just wanted to put me on notice. Walk it off.

    "N-. Nugh. Noriel, what happened?"

    "There was a sarcopha-huh." She coughs, wincing. "Sarcophagus, in the basement. The ditz opened it to 'free the mummy'."

    "Kara, don’t touch things!"

    "Sorry!"

    To be fair, she does actually look sorry. Zombie Kara is lying on the floor, the cracks in her skin being replaced by horribly burned flesh, her own… Body fat having bubbled up through the rends in her flesh. The 'S' brand… Appears to have actually been a tattoo and is still there, while her mouth…

    Magic induced transformations are usually somewhat 'generous' when they're undone. Changes just revert to their 'before' state with only externally applied changes remaining. Not in her case. Her mouth has returned to normal size but the supernumerary teeth tried to stay, resulting in…

    Some appear to have been pulverised, some are twisted… In some cases entirely out of their sockets, in others just… Sideways, tearing the gums as they went. I-. Right, clear her airway, check for injuries beyond the obvious and then put her in the recovery position. Reconstructive dentistry can wait.

    "What happened to her?"

    "A demonic curse of some kind. I have unmade it."

    "I'm really sorry. Is that-?" New Kara floats closer, then puts her hands over her mouth as she gets a better look. "Did I do that?"

    "No." Noriel folds her arms across her chest. "I did."

    "Kara, she was already possessed, or… Ensorced. Your mistake was in opening a container you couldn't see inside without appropriate caution. These injuries are probably the least bad reasonably probable outcome that could occur."

    "Okay." She nods her head three times in rapid succession. "Can we help her more?"

    "Um." New Kara's spotted Truggs. "What..? Happened to him?"

    "I made sure that he couldn't escape. He can regenerate, and if-."

    "Oh! That's okay, then." She nods. "Maiming regenerators obviously doesn't matter."

    Ah…

    Ignore it.

    "Noriel, does she need any other help?"

    Noriel shrugs as New Kara takes off her cloak to-.

    "No! No, don't put anything on the burns!" New Kara freezes, clutching her cloak to her chest. "Here." I take a purple healing ray out of subspace and hand it to her. "This will help with her injuries, but we'll leave a thorough examination until we can take her back to the Fortress under guard."

    New Kara nods and begins playing it over the ex-possessed Supergirl.

    "Of course, we still don't know what this Supergirl was doing here." I frown. "Where are the other two?"

    Angelika stretches, wincing slightly when she pulls her bruises.

    "They are still in the lower level. Should we take this as proof that Nylor Truggs was responsible for us being here?"

    "No. After that stunt, he gets a full telepathic trawl until we know everything he's been up to. I'm not assuming anything. Noriel, with me. I'm going to scan that sarcophagus and then you're going to burn it."

    "That is sensible. It is undoubtably tainted by unholy magic."

    "Angelika, are you alright?"

    "It has been a little while since someone hit me that hard. But I will recover."

    "Okay. Kara, you and Angelika stay up here, Noriel, you're with me."

    My armour glows as I patch it back up, a new spell eater slotting into place from my subspace arsenal. Lot of good the first one did, but I'm not really prepared to fight the Source yet. Once I'm in fighting shape I fly across the room and into the breach in the floor. Down through the dust and debris, and into… Some sort of secure holding warehouse. This isn't a recent thing; Truggs has been here for a while.

    "Kara? Anything going on down here?"

    "I found Nylor Truggs' kryptonite locker."

    I land and head towards her voice.

    "Are you alright?"

    Kara drifts out of the dark, a shimmering black crystal in her right hand.

    "Never better."

    I smile. "Glad to hear it. Where's the sarcophagus?"
     
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  16. Coda

    Coda Versed in the lewd.

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    Noticing some corrections on a re-read:

    Council

    One of the two single quotes is wrong.

    Usually "boorish" but I acknowledge she may be comparing Zeus to a pig.

    I WAS going to make a smart-aleck response about gelatine still being explosive, but apparently in British English that's just how "gelatin" is spelled. Guess this one doesn't need anything after all.
     
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  17. Coda

    Coda Versed in the lewd.

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    Oh THAT'S not good.
     
  18. Ngamer11

    Ngamer11 Experienced.

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    Brutal, but effective.

    Actually, if what you were afraid of was possible, it would've already happened. Since Native Kara has shielding, the kryptonite isn't affecting her. However, they should probably give Innocent Kara shielding too, just in case black kryptonite can affect her.
     
  19. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Brutal.

    Welp, Loriel still doesn't like demons.

    Not surprising after everything you've done.

    I get the feeling she's learning from Paul here.

    Not necessarily, though he is most likely taking advantage.

    This is not good.

    Well fuck.

    So either this is a separate, evil version of Kara, or like the BWL version this is a Kara who is more savage.
     
  20. 1moleman

    1moleman Know what you're doing yet?

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    .... Well do we get to count an "Evil" black kryptonite clone as a seperate instance of supergirl or is that only half of one? Just need to make sure the count is correct
     
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    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    "but I'm not really prepared to fight the Source"

    Good on you Paul for realising your lim...

    "yet. "

    ...nevermind


    It would be fun if it turns out the black kryptonite works on Paul for some reason.

    "That will be thirteen-point-two-four Supergirls, sir. Card or cash?"
     
  22. ForeverShogo

    ForeverShogo Not too sore, are you?

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    It depends.

    Black Kryptonite can split you into Good and Evil versions of yourself. It can also just make you evil.

    And honestly, I don't think there'd be a point in mentioning the black kryptonite in this context if she wasn't about to attack him. "Never better" is like the most cliche "they're evil now and about to attack you" line you can give if someone asks if you're okay.
     
  23. Massgamer

    Massgamer I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Paul equally tired of Nylor's shit.
    To be fair, it isn't totally wrong way to think since you know they will be okay later.
    I really hope Paul is just playing dumb here so as not to trigger evil Kara.
     
  24. Alasnuyo

    Alasnuyo I am always here

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    Wow. I think this is the first time Paul had wanted to un-exist someone badly enough to colour his speech black.
     
  25. CTrees

    CTrees Chasing the ring

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    Surprised there wasn't a Renegade interrupt in there, before the maiming.
     
  26. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    The joy of someone who's actually proficient in super-powered combat, I see. When you can fly as well as a Kryptonian, any surface counts as ground. At least the zombie Supergirl seems to just be brawling, so she's manageable...

    Well past the point of negotiation, Truggs. Either shut her down, or...

    :eek: ...Okay, OL is pissed. Looks like even he has limits on his patience for skullduggery.

    So, immune to local Kryptonite. That's to be expected, if she's interdimensional.

    Yeah, best not to get in the way of too many of those.

    Ow. A rare chance to experience what it feels like to get hit by a truck.

    Fan service, that ain't. Interesting that her clothes aren't covered by her invulnerability, like most Kryptonian variants. You know, like Post-crisis Superman had a forcefield around his body just large enough that his tights were protected but his cape wasn't?

    Friendly fire, Loriel! Do we need to give you a lesson on checking your Area of Effect?

    Evidently he's still got enough 'bad' energies for her theurgic energies to treat him as 'evil'...

    :rolleyes: ...Dammit, Kara-1... Girl needs to learn some impulse control.

    Go easy, OL, she's only been on Earth a couple of hours. She's only, what, fourteen?

    Eugh, nope... :confused: Mouth stuff is extra-skeevy.

    Given that there may be more Supergirl variants lurking... Probably best to leave putting Humpty-Dumpty back together for later, yes...

    And again, her youth comes through loud and clear... I rather suspect seeing the recordings from Earth (assuming that's how she knows Earth stuff) wasn't quite as... visceral as getting this close. I can't imagine the smell is any better for her.

    In other words, check before you go poking things in a supervillain lair.

    :V He done goofed. He played the stupid game, and won a prize!

    o_O What the hell has she been learning?! You do realise it still hurts, kara?

    Save it for later. If she's going to be hanging around, then you can educate her.

    Whoa! Mistake #n+1, Kara! Cloth plus burns equals pain-in-the-ass to clean up.

    So, if she recovers, that'll add, uh... 'Post-Infinite Crisis' Supergirl to the collection? Geez, it really is turning into 'Gotta Catch them all!' I'll be watching for the LEGO Supergirl. (And won't that be a sight? A human-sized LEGO minifigure...)

    Kara-16 and Dana? Let's hope Zombie there didn't literally go through them.

    And knowing that asshole, he has multiple layers of mental defences. He is not going to enjoy the process. :sneaky:

    Given that about the only people with comparable power are probably Overman and maybe Uncle Sam, yeah...

    Ugh, this is going to take forever, if he's got boobytraps around. Let's hope he doesn't.

    ...You are wearing your shielding, right, Kara? Because it certainly doesn't soudn like you're experiencing any pain from the Green stuff...

    :eek: ...Shit. Really hope she's wearing shielding. Or it's interdimensional and thus won't affect her...

    Better have that Gold Kryptonite at the ready, OL. Just in case.

    I really hope OL remembers what Black Kryptonite does to people, so he can take suitable precautions. Like, full containment on every piece of Kryptonite in the vault. Even if it doesn't affect this Kara, there's several other Kryptonians at risk upstairs... And the last thing anyone needs is an unrestrained Evil Kryptonian on the loose.


    Mr Zoat, some corrections:
    The ditz opened it to 'free the mummy'."
    Double Space
    Maybe delete 'with'?
    These injuries are probably the least bad reasonably probable outcome that could occur."
    Noriel shrugs as New Kara takes off her cloak to-.
    Feels a bit off, but not sure how to fix...



    Which may suggest that hurting Truggs was the Paragon option, as those don't get called out for OL...
     
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    Jesus Christ. What did he just say about opening containers that you can't see inside of?
     
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    Caerwen Know what you're doing yet?

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    He is. There was black kryptonite around the rock his Karas pod was in when he went to rescue her. He was very careful with it.
     
  29. Darko

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    Less pissed and more done with his shit.

    His soul is made of greed.

    Hey, Paul seems to be teaching her here so it's understandable that she'd get some weird ideas.

    He sorta is doing that.

    And her lesbian Danner enhanced aunt, as well as that Valkirye, and the Martian and probably Nazi Aquaman.

    When he and Kon went to Krypton he saw a bit of it and he was worried about it.
     
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    what was he about to say dammit!?:confused:
     
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