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He was wrong, as it turned out; when he snapped her neck she didn't feel anything at all.
Well then. That's one way to initiate someone.
The hell are these things?
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He was wrong, as it turned out; when he snapped her neck she didn't feel anything at all.
Are there really no other Square-class mage equivalents on campus that might stay in on a festival night, besides Colbert the Bald Eagle and Dwarfbro? Osmond, or any of the other teachers, or any visiting archmages, or... anything?That would fail. It would undoubtedly fail. There was no chance for success any more. That familiar wouldn't go to the party. If he was wandering the grounds and saw her siege golem then he'd simply destroy it. She couldn't stand up to that strength directly.
Who by? Is Wardes - or whoever - getting testy for some reason?Which was, with the increased pressure being laid on her, a very good thing.
Is the feeling of being investigated, when involved in a con that would lead to her death, the same level as uncomfortable as being leered at by the skeevy guy?Of course, the one sent to investigate was a frustrating sort of man.
...
Thus, she was able to determine that someone was observing her intensely; or, if not her, at least their group. However, she couldn't tell who. It was quite frustrating.
This sounds like more of a verbal tic than a mental one. Stuttering in your head sounds kind of weird.
Ehh... I don't know. If she was able to prepare earth-spell traps in the vault this way, why couldn't she have just had a wall move aside?Under her gag, Matilda de Saxe-Gotha grinned as her plan came to fruition.
This is a good one. Cover thine ass first, the first rule of being a successful douchebag."I hope you don't mean to imply this is in any way my fault, Headmaster. Blame lays upon you no matter how one looks at it; the thief infiltrated your Academy successfully enough to lay a trap of this magnitude! In the hallway outside of the vault itself, no less. The Queen shall hear of your negligence, and we shall launch a thorough investigation." Kenneth shook his head as he left, braided beads clacking rhythmically against each other.
Would Guiche say 'play the hero', here? 'Be the hero', maybe.TotalAbsolutism said:
It took me a minute to realize this was Saito."I have acquired the list of items confirmed to have been stolen, my Lady." Guiche tried not to scowl at the common servant. Certainly he felt a level of camaraderie with his instructor, but that had been tempered by the anger that had been sown through dozens of vicious spars.
Dwarvish is Germanian? Kinda makes sense, sure; I can dig it."Th' red one's here 'cause she kin speak Dwarvish, and ah like t'tell jokes th' way they were intended.
Good joke. Reminds me of Happosai from Ranma 1/2; whenever he tells a tale from his youth, Young Happi is the same 2 foot tall troll, just with a goatee and black hair.Guiche tilted his head, but all of his attempts to imagine a younger Old Osmond just created the image of a young man with the exact same facial hair. Judging by Kirche's snickering she was suffering from the same problem.
On the one hand, this is a change from canon, where he met a dragon, right? On the other hand, conservation of detail suggests that since we've gotten to see a faux-hydra already, it's the right call to have them come up again. I kind of hope they'll run into a real one at some point.
Army of Alviss dolls < army of Banefire elementals. Yikes.
The traps were on the ceilings and walls of the corridors around and outside the vault; the actual walls surrounding the interior of the vault itself were impervious to her attempts at enspelling them.Ehh... I don't know. If she was able to prepare earth-spell traps in the vault this way, why couldn't she have just had a wall move aside?
Changed.
Line edited to, "Guiche tried not to scowl at the Louise's familiar as he materialised."
... 'the Zero's familiar', perhaps?Line edited to, "Guiche tried not to scowl at the Louise's familiar as he materialised."
... derp.
I'm not sure how I feel about Kirche acquiring character development offscreen, even if it is Guiche's story.Well, thanks to him she'd cried for the first time in a long time. Which was actually a good thing, as far as she'd concerned. When he'd needed to he discarded that air of foolishness and acquired a certain paternal grace about him. They'd had a good, earnest discussion about… quite a lot of things. Her treatment of Louise for one.
Led.
Try to act, I'd say.
I feel like she should have a line here assuring us that she totally COULD bag Guiche if she wanted to! She just doesn't want to.She'd often considered spotting him a quick roll but, unlike her varied paramours, she doubted he'd be able to resist the urge to brag about it. They all knew better than that. Guiche… was much less likely to do so. At least back then. He might be able to keep his mouth shut now but he'd also quit his two-timing ways.
Now that's not fair, Guiche certainly paid attention to what young women said. Well, pretty young women. Pretty young noblewomen. Who seemed interested.Now, though, he was able to connect a few dots faster than he might have otherwise by simple dint of paying attention to what other people said. It was weird to think of how oblivious he'd been not that long ago; particularly as he couldn't exactly point to any one event that made him decide to listen to those around him. Really, it wasn't a decision so much as just a thing he'd started doing at some point. How peculiar.
This is not going to go anywhere near as well as Guiche thinks it will, I am certain."In this case, good Ser, I am afraid I have my own debts to pay. Come!" He gestured expansively, striking a pose that he thought looked properly heroic. "We shall go to retrieve your maiden!"
My headcanon for this scene:Much to their surprise, however, they found that Old Osmond was currently in the middle of… well, it looked like packing. He acknowledged them as they entered but didn't pause his efforts. It was bizarre to see the old man dressed in something that wasn't his school robes. Instead he was in a well-worn traveller's outfit.
It was pretty cool that Wardes also didn't quite swan in and immediately succeed, just plant the seed in Guiche's mind."I decline! And you are a Griffon Knight in any case, you cannot challenge me on behalf of another to whom you have no connection. Perhaps the Vallière brat is your betrothed but, just like the girl, you are not yet part of the family. Please, see yourself out; I have no more time for your foolishness." Wardes bowed his head, frustration writ large across his features.
Her.
Thing is, he'd been intending to do something else entirely to gain the services of the unusually talented and blatantly magical smith. He even says as much. I misphrased what he was saying, I think, as I more meant for him to be implying that the whole point of his interactions with Guiche was to acquire Kenneth; right up until Guiche showed that he cared about her.Overall the confrontation with Mott was well done. The old boy's perfectly insulated against any sort of repercussions, and it feels like Guiche and company for all their power are rolling in the palm of his hand. That said... it seems a little too convoluted, you know? He spent political capital with the Osmonds, made genteel threats to the girl, and so on and so forth... all to acquire Kenneth? With Siesta herself as just a bonus prize if it didn't pan out? What made him think Saito would prevail upon Louise who would prevail upon Guiche who would go to Mott's mansion, risking everything in the process?
It feels like it'd make more sense for it to be the other way around, and him being willing to trade up from Siesta on a spur of the moment thing, the way he was prepared to give her up for a favor from the Vallieres... except then he would seem weirdly invested in Siesta, which in person he's obviously not.
What by, specifically?
Everything. The secret society of dead folks, and what the fuck just happened with Karin getting ganked by Eleonore(?).
and what the fuck just happened with Karin getting ganked by Eleonore(?).
The nature of the quasi-religious paramilitary cult that Not!Saito belongs to will be explained eventually.Everything. The secret society of dead folks, and what the fuck just happened with Karin getting ganked by Eleonore(?).
Fucking Joseph. [Twitches violently]The nature of the quasi-religious paramilitary cult that Not!Saito belongs to will be explained eventually.
As for Eleonore and Francisque; both of them were invited to visit the King of Gallia, and both of them then ended up returning home in an apparently dazed state then attacking their parents.
My current work is an interlude primarily featuring him.
But then I learned to relax and love hypno toad.
The King of Gallia stared at the muscles in his forearm as he slowly closed his hand and clenched it into a fist. After a few moments he relaxed it again and presented his open palm to the floor of the empty throne room. He clenched again; watching his flesh shifting in the unearthly green light that was the only source of illumination.
It shone from the armoured figures standing in front of the decorative pillars to either side of him. Tongues of sickly green fire licked out from the eye slit and little breathing holes in the full plate. The joints glowed as well where the phantom flames attempted to leak out of the bodies they were anchored too. Every stray wisp reached in the direction of the throne.
Nor Zharaqui, for that matter. Some light may be shed on this subject with the next interlude; wherein we take a trip to Romalia and complete the quartet.Kenneth doesn't seem to have trouble with his skills, nor Saito.
I like that magic in your ZnT world is so quantified, when in canon it totally isn't. 'If he's Triangle, you can expect this, or this, or this.' It works very well for a setting we are introduced to via a school. Of course, why are triangle Water mages able to make Ice and not, I dunno... Steam? Presumably there's some higher-order magical laws in play, even if we don't understand it."He's never been seen to use ice, but if he's Triangle it's a possibility you'll need to keep in mind."
If the rain is pouring down, shouldn't visibility be very poor? Unless Water mages can sense their element that finely, which may be true, given what Mott gets up to during the duel.
This is hyperbole because Guiche is overwhelmed and panicky, right? Because Mott's command of water shouldn't grant him any magical snake powers, and Wardes just got done telling Guiche that he was fitter and spryer than the decades of decadent living Mott has gone through.
This is a good motive for Mott, though.Fighting in the rain was soothing more than anything else, at least for Mott. It reminded him of a simpler time. Fighting amidst ocean spray and roiling waves for his very life. Not that he'd truly enjoyed that life. Far from it. The relaxation came from the knowledge that he had transcended that meagre existence. Perhaps he had once felt some joy in the thrill of combat but, as time had gone on, he'd come to realize what he really loved was winning.
Is that 'heid' intentional?
Brimir. It is quite a dwarvish curse, though.
I'd make it a comma, not a semicolon.[/quote]"Stop by the Capitol when you have your holidays, lad; if you like.
From what I understand Ice is considered Triangle, or Line; I can't recall which. Either way, I see no harm in choosing to specify.I like that magic in your ZnT world is so quantified, when in canon it totally isn't. 'If he's Triangle, you can expect this, or this, or this.' It works very well for a setting we are introduced to via a school. Of course, why are triangle Water mages able to make Ice and not, I dunno... Steam? Presumably there's some higher-order magical laws in play, even if we don't understand it.
I've tried to expand the different properties of the elements a bit. Air can be used to accelerate oneself in both speed and reflexes; ther former explicitly and the latter implicitly. So I'm adding similar utility to various spells. Mott is using, more or less, a thin sheathe of water around himself to support his movements; this is actually mentioned briefly in the text. If he were better practised he wouldn't even need that crutch.This is hyperbole because Guiche is overwhelmed and panicky, right? Because Mott's command of water shouldn't grant him any magical snake powers, and Wardes just got done telling Guiche that he was fitter and spryer than the decades of decadent living Mott has gone through.
Yes. Yes it is.
Huh. So many people get that wrong, then, and it's never been pointed out to me before. Time to do a lot of editing.
Either works here, I think. And speech is okay being a bit off, grammar-wise.
Nice foreshadowing with Saito's horse, earlier. Likewise the choice to make the scene from Mott's perspective. Got a proper horror vibe going.Try as he might, all he could recall of the attacker were the golden eyes, a vague sensation of 'crimson', and a presence that could only have been described as sinister.