Kildar
Tarrasque in Training
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So far its been brilliant to me, I always prefer the 'generic' perks that let 'you' do all the work.Ultimately, this story is my second attempt at experimenting with the Celestial Forge format. And like all experiments, not everything you try works the first time. We'll see how it goes from here.
Plus the slow drip feed lets us actually absorb the perks and then release the results over time, leading to the perks actually meaning stuff.
Ignoring the usual nonsense, most people would agree that the story has been interesting and is a fresh viewpoint of a slightly overused concept.
Beyond that.... I do think that if you changed that one line a lot of complaining would vanish, 'I got what you intended', But it took me two reads to get it and most appear to have not bothered.
Just my two cents.
I honestly thought you picked it because the 'OCP' was a math equation that led to most other things, so the 'math genius' could use that to handwave stuff.Yeah, the series of posts immediately after I put the chapter up has only led me in very quick hindsight to the realization that I picked something with a lot more oomph than I'd originally estimated.
Welp, time to improvise. Which, to be fair, is a lot of how I write normally.
Luckily you do have a fairly good way to slow things down.
You see just because you have a mental database, that doesn't mean you can use most of it.
One example is the programming, which would take you years to program out line by line, otherwise known as the tools to make the tools to make the tools.
So just use the ideas and see what the people you work with can do with them.
...huh you know that does explain some things about your writing.In hindsight, I begin to realize that I'd forgotten that most of my readers didn't grow up during the Cold War. Because this is so intuitive to me that I literally don't think about it anymore.
Some of the mental disconnects I mean, as I have occasionally noticed a few 'patterns' that can throw you out of a story mid read.
ie A>B>F...??? The 'CDE' here being things that you have lived through, that others haven't.
Yeah a lot of people have been complaining about it, or talking about how shes going to 'show them all'.... but thats honestly not the way Cliff writes stuff, since he doesn't write two D characters.On the topic of Sofia's assignment, the part I found most interesting doesn't seem to have been pointed out yet. I can dream up all sorts of reasons why the GP might have drafted her and put her on a navy ship, but none of them seem consistent with the group's supposed mission.
I figured they just wanted to see how she ticked, plus gain some legal authority over her. So it's all basically a test.... basically as her mental rant suggested.
All stuff within their mission.