Vergil had never felt so small and insignificant until he saw a toddler the size of a mountain...
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Yes.
I will definitely take what you said under consideration for a possible addition to the first couple of chapters in the future. While Dante will be the main rival for the MC for most of the story there are more people present and other groups. As for the catalog it will be expanded upon in later chapters. There are too many techniques to list and one of the limiting factors is he can only search for what he's looking for. Some things can seep through the filter. But I will go into the limits of the brand more in future chapters.I am very intrigued by the premise behind this story, but I do feel like the first few foundational chapters (and thus the story as a whole) suffer from being too rushed in pacing.
Having the MC elaborate on the catalog shoved inside his head would help, giving the reader a better grip on what the main powers/feature of the story could entail would be a good attention grabbing point.
Also, having the MC elaborate on the other people there with him, giving the reader more reasons to be invested in the relationships would also help.
I do like this story a lot, and feel like it has a lot of potential. Thank you for sharing it, amd I hope you continue with it!
Thank you for the reply!There are too many techniques to list and one of the limiting factors is he can only search for what he's looking for.
Yeah, probably. You could add back in the sec scenes you've skipped then too