Officer of the Republic
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How I learned to live with the Force
(without being turned into a...
Or
How I learned to live with the Force
(without being turned into a...
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GSpectre | 34 |
What I can struggle through seems interesting. It has serious potential.
But first and foremost, my friend...
Formatting.
Add a whole line of space between paragraphs so you won't have the giant walls of text that put off readers.
This is literally the only problem I can see with your story so far.
Delicious. Older-Than-Time have a very good with the formatting, though. Makes it more aesthetically pleasing to the eye and easier to read. *Licks cheek* Appreciate my neckbeard slobber, for this saliva of mine is holy substance meant to invigorate you.
Are there going to be an attempt to learn Battle Meditation, like the one Bastila wielded all those millenia ago? Start learning now, a decade before the Clone Wars breaks out ought to pay dividends. You've hinted heavily that you'll focus a lot on space-warfare, so I thought this to be a natural direction for your character to take.
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The letter obviously has to begin with "Dear DEL (Dark Evil Lord)..."
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Are the Togratu any relation to the Togruta?"Hungh," Ori could tell that by now the salesman was convinced that he was a Hutt backed pirate, not that he would go out of his way to convince the Togratu otherwise. It was always best to let people think you were more used to violence then you really were, it cut down on the number of times you actually needed to use it.
I'm fairly sure his master will think so, when he hears how this 'follow the will of the Force' exercise went.Somehow something tells me that those light sabers will be important.
Same here.
Hnnnn. A Jedi that doe not want to be... I wonder what would happen should he meet Skywalker?
Besides I only have authorization to investigate projects that are being currently funded rather then past projects." Skrath shrugged as he spoke
Unless the 'force' guides Ori to the correct piece of data to investigate it early in his assisting of Skrath