Summary: Harry is very intelligent and wise for his age. Unfortunately, that means he can...
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AoMythology | 5 |
Too notch chapter mate. Easily better than %99 of HP fanfictions. I hope you can continue writing this story.
Interesting start. I like how you're handling Harry's interaction with what I presume is the Scarcrux.
Am I being too bold for assuming that McGonagall was speaking about Lily Evans? I mean, there is the chance that I´m reading too much into i it, but I can´t imagine why she would say that to Harry if not for that.
About the chapter, it was overall a nice one but it feel kinda disyuntive, there isn´t a true continuity between its parts. In particular, the section with FakeDum, while entertaining in its own, look out of place. Like if you wrote abc5dEf.
Harry is truly jerk with his few friends, but that is a creative choice and you probably have plans for that. Plans not necessarily to fix it (I never understood why people like to ¨fix¨ characters´ personalities), but maybe to make something interesing from it.
In general. GJ.
That and the fact that no 11 years old kid spek like that. Then again, I can´t think of any fanfic where the kids acts and speak like kids. My guess it is because there is no way that a fic would be well received by the audience if that were the case.