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only made this for other people to actually start writing a cardfight vanguard(si) themselves so i can read them and for the grammar and other stuff related to that tough luck many people have tried telling me to improve it with no luckI love Cardfight Vanguard and I'm really happy to see a SI for it.
I have to be honest. It's kinda hard to read your story.The grammar and dialogue feels needs work since it's
awkward to read.
You posting pictures of the cards is nice in theory but because they're so large in comparison to the text and since the break the flow of the dialogue it ends up kinda klunky.
I believe it would be better to simply link the cards being played to its wiki rather than posting it whole or simply exclude it as since any prospective reader is expected to be familiar with the series and the game. And if they don't know the card being played they could just look it up on the internet.
I would suggest looking at Hiyuusha's stories on FFN. The YGO stories should help you structure how to better write a card match and better express it through text.
I hope this critism is ok and that you aren't offended or mad.
only made this for other people to actually start writing a cardfight vanguard(si) themselves so i can read them and for the grammar and other stuff related to that tough luck many people have tried telling me to improve it with no luck
Yes,cause in the show they should an episode where Misaki is fighting Emi with the trial decks being sold in the shop,but sadly you can't watch anymore at YouTube cause the official channel remove iti never play vanuard but i see si so its good
is selling decks even a thing in vangard? bc in yu gi oh thats like super rare