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This seems to be the right thread for this: How would you write something like someone crying in...

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This seems to be the right thread for this: How would you write something like someone crying in despair? I mean the sound they'd make. Laughter is easy with 'ha-ha" and such; but I have a lot of trouble trying to write someone mournfully crying in despair.

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I don't think there's an easy way to do so... people cry differently...
 
Biigoh said:
I don't think there's an easy way to do so... people cry differently...
I know; but it's just annoying having the sound in your head but not knowing how to put it down using letters.

Hymn of Ragnarok said:
Uh-huh-huh-huh comes to mind, but bii's got the right of it.
Closest sound for the aftermath of the cry; thanks.

Selias said:
Uhh... "Boo-hoo?" "Waaaahhhh?" Maybe *sob*?
All entered my head and were immediately discarded for looking to 'silly' if that makes sense.
 
Don't write the onomatopoeia; just describe the heart-wrenching sound of their sobbing, how they're hunched over, the trails of smeared mascara leaving trails down their face, et cetera.
 
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nick012000 said:
Don't write the onomatopoeia; just describe the heart-wrenching sound of their sobbing, how they're hunched over, the trails of smeared mascara leaving trails down their face, et cetera.
I wrote both; both the cry and what it was like, I really needed the actual sound being uttered in the narrative to get the scene down the way I wanted to.
 
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EnderofWorlds said:
Closest sound for the aftermath of the cry; thanks.

Yeah, although if I level a criticism, it feels like Chifuyu reaches 'aftermath' a little too quickly. You had a pretty good sound to Chifuyu screaming her lungs out, I just feel like there should have been a since or paragraph describing time passing, give a sense of her crying herself hoarse and now all she's capable of are little choked sobs.
 
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Hymn of Ragnarok said:
Yeah, although if I level a criticism, it feels like Chifuyu reaches 'aftermath' a little too quickly. You had a pretty good sound to Chifuyu screaming her lungs out, I just feel like there should have been a since or paragraph describing time passing, give a sense of her crying herself hoarse and now all she's capable of are little choked sobs.
Yeah, I'll probably fix that; move the second bit further down. Thanks.
 
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