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The Missing Hokage v2.0

Discussion in 'CW Index' started by RiceHot, Dec 26, 2021.

  1. RiceHot

    RiceHot Getting out there.

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    Original challenge: "Missing Hokage Challenge" by Perfect Lionheart.

    We all know how Tsunade only returned to Konoha because of Naruto. Well, in this case, the start of the divergence is when the council starts to get all huffy, overruling her about the boy so they can banish him, Tsunade DOES NOT just sit back and take it like a little lost lamb.

    If they are throwing out the reason she returned to town in the first place, she goes with him. Thus, you have the Missing Hokage, as Tsunade just packs up and walks out of town with Naruto. Shizune, Tonton and Hinata all trailing along.

    But she's smart enough not to leave without first using that Hokage stamp to her advantage. 'Team Hokage' are pardoned of all past crimes, released from all future obligations, and are walking out with several notable treasures, including the Scroll of Forbidden Seals and a sizable fraction of the town's treasury - all released to herself under her authority as Hokage.

    If they want to treat her family like crap, she can return that favour.

    Things to happen in this challenge:

    One, Tsunade took the hat with her.

    Two, she takes both Naruto and Hinata on as her apprentices, after promoting both to chunin on her authority as Hokage. Naruto goes through some extreme, and probably ongoing, chakra control training, but both Naruto and Hinata start powering up, learning her strength and medical techniques.

    Three, Tsunade and Shizune start studying from the Scroll of Forbidden Seals, and secrets from it are held out as rewards to the two kids for successfully completing bits of their medical training.

    Four, the group goes through a period of being wandering treasure hunters, like Indiana Jones, but ninja. They can move through any countries or encounter any characters the author likes while doing this. One preferred treasure hunt is to penetrate a certain castle and RETRIEVE, not destroy, the Lizard summoning contract held within.

    Five, One of the things they walked out with was Sarutobi's Monkey Summoning contract. Holding multiple summon contracts is possible, but most people have no reason to, not even having enough chakra to summon one boss, let alone need many.

    Six, because of their skills and treasures (both taken from Konoha and recovered on hunts), ALL of the Hidden Villages, major and minor, are trying to get the Missing Hokage to settle down in their village. Some use fair means like persuasion and incentives, others play foul.

    Seven, the Kitsune Clan bloodline from my fic, Chunin Exam Day, is available for Naruto and Hinata if you want to use it. That includes the regeneration, chakra boost, nearly prehensile tail and parabolic ears, although if you can find a way to add Wood or Ice you are welcome to them.

    Eight, this should be a Naruto/Hinata matchup, though harems are also acceptable.

    Back around town, the following should happen:

    One, people are very upset, for any number of reasons. People, especially Team 7 (whether Sasuke was retrieved or not), who expected things to get better with Naruto gone are disappointed. If anything, stuff they expected to improve with Naruto gone are going the other way.

    Two, with no one doing the paperwork, Konoha's infrastructure and mission assignments are doing poorly.

    Three, in response to number two, above, the village council that drove her away eventually decides to revoke Tsunade's title of Hokage for extreme dereliction of duty (this, after her face is at least partly carved onto the monument). In her place, they appoint Jiraiya, this time successfully getting him to accept the post.

    Four, Jiraiya tries to get the council to revoke their decree of banishment on Naruto. They refuse. He points out that they have now directly opposed four of the six Hokages they've ever had on this issue. The Fourth wanted him to be seen as a hero, the Third wanted him treated better, the Fifth left town with him when they banished him, and now Jiraiya, the Sixth, wants him back and they won't agree. When they still refuse, he pulls almost an identical exit to Tsunade's, leaving town with a few genin and loads of treasures to go join up with Tsunade. He takes the newly made replacement hat with him.

    Five, soon after the departure of the Sixth Hokage, they appoint a Seventh: Kakashi.

    Six, although Kakashi stays in town, ALL of his bad habits as a genin teacher carry over to his tenure as Hokage, and between his extreme lateness and laziness, having Kakashi as Hokage is almost no better than having no Hokage at all. The town is going to pieces, the clans are unhappy, and NOBODY can do any missions because the paperwork on everything is so far behind. Konoha literally starts going to pieces, and some factions become desperate to get one of their missing Hokages back.

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    I want to write a story, but am looking for a good co-writer, especially for dialogues. Or am open to being beta for someone who can write it on their own and need help with a beta.

    I would name this as RiceHot-Perfect Lionheart NarutoVerse Challenge (RPLNC), or "The Missing Hokage v2.0".

    STORYLINE:

    We all know how Tsunade only returned to Konoha because of Naruto. Well, in this case, the start of the divergence is when the council starts to get all huffy, overruling her about the boy so they can banish him, Tsunade DOES NOT just sit back and take it like a little lost lamb.

    If they are throwing out the reason she returned to town in the first place, then she goes with him. Thus, you have the "Missing Hokage", as Tsunade just packs up and walks out of town with Naruto. Shizune, Tonton, and Hinata all trailing along.

    But she's smart enough not to leave without first using that Hokage stamp to her advantage. 'Team Hokage' are pardoned of all past crimes, released from all future obligations, and are walking out with several notable treasures, including the Scroll of Forbidden Seals, and a sizable fraction of the town's treasury - all released to herself under her authority as Hokage.

    If they want to treat her family like crap, she can return that favour.

    REQUIREMENTS:

    1. Tsunade took the Hokage hat with her.

    1. Tsunade takes both Naruto and Hinata on as her apprentices, after promoting both to chunin on her authority as Hokage. Naruto goes through some extreme, and probably ongoing, chakra control training, but both Naruto and Hinata start powering up, learning her strength and medical techniques.

    1. Tsunade and Shizune start studying from the Scroll of Forbidden Seals, and secrets from it are held out as rewards to the two kids for successfully completing bits of their medical training.

    1. The group goes through a period of being wandering treasure hunters, like Indiana Jones, but ninja. They can move through any countries or encounter any characters the author likes while doing this. One preferred treasure hunt is to penetrate a certain castle and RETRIEVE, not destroy, the Lizard summoning contract held within.

    1. One of the things they walked out with was Sarutobi's Monkey Summoning contract. Holding multiple summon contracts is possible, but most people have no reason to, not even having enough chakra to summon one boss, let alone need many.

    1. Because of their skills and treasures (both taken from Konoha and recovered on hunts), ALL of the Hidden Villages, major and minor, are trying to get the Missing Hokage to settle down in their village. Some use fair means like persuasion and incentives, others play foul. Even a few of the nation's that Naruto has fought in would be happy to have them, even as guests, if not opening their own new Hidden Village.

    1. The Kitsune Clan bloodline from Perfect Lionheart's fic "Chunin Exam Day", is available for Naruto and Hinata if you want to use it. That includes the regeneration, chakra boost, nearly prehensile tail and parabolic ears, although if you can find a way to add Wood or Ice you are welcome to them.

    1. This is strictly a Naruto/Hinata matchup and cannot remove Hinata. Multiple spouses or harem are acceptable as long it is done in a tasteful way, without making it pathetic and putting-off people from reading it. But for the love of god, keep Sakura out of it. Ino too, maybe.

    Back around town, the following should happen:

    1. People are very upset, for any number of reasons. People, especially Team 7 (whether Sasuke was retrieved or not), who expected things to get better with Naruto gone are disappointed. If anything, stuff they expected to improve with Naruto gone are going the other way.

    1. With no one doing the paperwork, Konoha's infrastructure and mission assignments are doing poorly.

    1. In response to number ten, above, the village council that drove her away eventually decides to revoke Tsunade's title of Hokage for extreme dereliction of duty, (This is after her face is completely carved onto the monument). In her place, they appoint Jiraiya, this time successfully getting him to accept the post, who is the Sixth Hokage.

    1. Jiraiya tries to get the council to revoke their decree of banishment on Naruto. They refuse. He points out that they have now directly opposed four of the six Hokages they've ever had on this issue. The Fourth wanted him to be seen as a hero, the Third wanted him treated better, the Fifth left town with him when they banished him, and now Jiraiya, the Sixth, wants him back and they won't agree. When they still refuse, he pulls almost an identical exit to Tsunade's, leaving town with a few genin and loads of treasures to go join up with Tsunade. He takes the newly made replacement Hokage hat with him.

    1. Soon after the departure of the Sixth Hokage, they appoint a Seventh: Kakashi.

    1. Although Kakashi stays in town, ALL of his bad habits as a genin teacher carry over to his tenure as Hokage, and between his extreme lateness and laziness, having Kakashi as Hokage is almost no better than having no Hokage at all. The town is going to pieces, the clans are unhappy, and NOBODY can do any missions because the paperwork on everything is so far behind. Konoha literally starts going to pieces, and some factions become desperate to get one of their missing Hokages back.

    1. Have fun with the story.


    GUIDELINES:

    1. For the love of god, satan, goodness, evilness, devil, demon, angel, or whatever rocks your boat, please do not make this an "Evil/Manipulative Sarutobi", who wants Naruto to be a weapon. Sick and tired of these stories.

    1. While not mentioned in the canon, Naruto might have been physically abused, but please keep it to a minimum, rather than village-wide hunts and severe abuse, mutilation, and near-death stories that are sick and stupid. How can no one notice it and try to stop it? How can Naruto or anyone willingly forgive it all? How can the very same people treat him as a hero later. Too much stupidity by some writers, otherwise it isn't worth being a ninja village.

    1. As part of the growth of characters, especially if the story is romantic, "Fluff" is acceptable. While NarutoVerse has this "Old enough to kill, old enough to fuck, old enough to drink", please dial-down all "Lemons", "Smut", and any kind of sexual stuff, especially between under-aged characters. Let the character at least be 16 before they do all this.

    1. Is Minato Namikaze, the child of Jiraiya and Tsunade, that she gave up for adoption, and neither knew till much later? Preferably after Tsunade goes missing with Naruto and co. That could help Naruto get Mokuton (Wood), and be heir of Senju, (Thus an even bigger harem to repopulate Senju Clan along with Namikaze Clan and Uzumaki Clan). Though not necessary, as Tsunade already views Naruto like a grandson/and like Nawaki, her brother.

    1. While some stories revolve heavily of Clan Restoration/Revival Act (CRA), to make harems legal or acceptable. If Naruto has more than Hinata, it would be preferable out of love, with CRA being an optional tag-along, which Tsunade would never seriously make anyone, let alone Naruto follow, (Especially if number four, above, is accepted and Naruto is her actual grandson).

    1. Mental Health Issues: Any kind of abuse and neglect is very traumatic. Try to keep in mind the mental health issues and try not to joke or gloss over them. PTSD is a B***h, that I wouldn't wish on my worst enemy. If you don't know about the topic, then please do yourself and everyone a favour and not talk about it. Especially don't give out stupid advice.

    1. Crossovers, however small or however large are acceptable, even encouraged. Just don't make it too convoluted, or stupid, or god forbid both.

    1. While some stories were fun, there were more stories with dark shades, and continued getting darker and darker. Some with too convoluted back stories, world building, abuse, etc... Please leave a warning in the summary if the story is darker than a decent fun story.

    1. Tsunade and Naruto might decide to settle in the old Uzushiogakure (Uzushiogakure no Sato, Village Hidden by Whirling Tides). Maybe even deciding to rebuild a new Uzushiogakure, with either Tsunade or Naruto being the new Uzukage, (I kinda like Uzikage more). If Naruto, then Tsunade become like Regent-Uzukage till she feels he is grown up enough. They recruit other independent clans, ninja or civilian or both. (Added on 18th Oct 2021: If I am not mistaken, Kusihna's father was both Uzukage and the Damiyo of Uzu, or something like that, making her "ROYAL", hence Naruto inherits both. Don't remember if this was canon or fanon).

    2. Does the Sage of Six Paths help Naruto by revealing him to be the reincarnation of Ashura, earlier than he does in canon? If yes, does he help him understand his powers and grow?

    3. If number ten, above, is accepted or not. Does Sasuke get a redemption arc? If no, then is he like the canon version, or better than , or worse than the canon version of Sasuke? If he doesn't get redemption or is worse than the canon version, then does Sage of Six Paths still reveal and give him powers of Indra, or does he give those powers to Naruto too? If Sasuke doesn't get a redemption or is worse than canon, what happens to Sakura? Either way she doesn't get to be part of Naruto's harem. And at best can be a friend/sister-figure to Naruto.

    4. Idea by Gundam Meister Uzumaki, "Karin discovers that she still has family and sets out to find them? Then she slowly falls in love with Naruto as well?". I like the concept and to build it further Karin and any other Uzumaki still alive, sets out to help Naruto, and if number nine above is used, along with any living Uzumaki, other living former citizens of Uzushiogakure might shift back to the old Uzushiogakure (Or the newly rebuilt Uzushiogakure), settling down there and starting a new life.

    If you want to write a story with this challenge, then please PM me with the link to the story.
     
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  2. ThedudeManBro

    ThedudeManBro The Dudeliest Man on the block, Bro!

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    Uuuum. Not to be a dick, but are you SURE you should have any kind of close proximity with anything fondled aggressively by Perfect Lionheart, let alone penned by him?
     
  3. RiceHot

    RiceHot Getting out there.

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    Hmmm.... What is the issue with Perfect Lionheart? I am unaware of anything apart from two of his stories and this challenge.
     
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  4. ThedudeManBro

    ThedudeManBro The Dudeliest Man on the block, Bro!

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    Welp, if you've read his stories like the "classic" Chuunin Exam Day", and his other whack fics, and felt nothing big about it, then I'm not ruining your enjoyment and all the more power to you. I'm not a content cop, and I'm not going around trying to ruin any body's fun.

    I apologize if I bothered you. Have a good day and a Happy New Year's.
     
  5. RiceHot

    RiceHot Getting out there.

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    I liked the premise of Chuunin Exam Day and this challenge, the two stories I read. But I was unhappy with the story and his repeated ending and restarting, parts of the story itself, and the final end, at least what I think was the final ending.

    While I might not like a story or its creator, I wouldn't mind using the idea, with proper credit, and trying to create something better. Yet I would also like to know any behind the scenes info, so I don't fuck up myself.

    Thanks for the info. Have a good day and a Happy New Year too.
     
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    ThedudeManBro The Dudeliest Man on the block, Bro!

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    Haaa. OK. I also enjoy his premises, the issue is the rest of the story that mangles the setting, characters, and basic humanity to make sure his self insert can feel like the BIG DOG.

    Still, if you want, here's a link in all the tropes with a small summary on his works and tropes involved.

    https://allthetropes.org/wiki/Jared_Ornstead

    Mind you, it's only a summary on him, and should be regarded as such, but the man HAS his issues, and that shouldn't ruin your experiences with his premises. Heck, now that I'm writing this, I realize that probably he probably won't even appear in this site, so I should not have even commented on it.
    I miiiiight have jumped the gun there:V
     
  7. RiceHot

    RiceHot Getting out there.

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    Requesting an admin/mod to please transfer this thread to CW Index.


    Edit: Thanks for moving it.
     
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