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Andy333
Andy333
That's the idea. Anyway, I'm getting some sleep. Night. Hope everything with your brother works out all right.
Bob is bob
Bob is bob
Sleep well
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Bob is bob
Heyo
Andy333
Andy333
Hey, how are you doing?
Bob is bob
Bob is bob
Girl replied at 5 about her playing on game cube and I replied to her stuff on Cowboy Bepop while saying I'd be free around 9 to chat
Andy333
Andy333
Nice. She has a real game cube? God, I remember having one of those when I was in elementary school, me and my sisters used to play Mario Sunshine all the time. Makes me a little nostalgic. Hope it goes well for you.
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Bob is bob
I played Wolverine's revenge which is a interesting game with a combo system where you build up points and then hit one button to activate a complex attack chain
Andy333
Andy333
I had a friend back then who had that game. But he also had GTA Vice city and we always played that instead. lol.
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Bob is bob
It is a hard game that Wolverine's Revenge and talk Vicky or something else?
Andy333
Andy333
I'm cool with talking about anything. I'm not sick anymore, but my throat is still super sore so I've been chilling the last couple days.
Bob is bob
Bob is bob
How goes your writing?
Andy333
Andy333
Been rereading Misses Dallon, getting nostalgic and cringing a little at some of the mistakes. lol. I'm actually a little impressed at how good the sex scenes turned out. That's an area I struggle with, so it does make me a little proud. But the dialogue could be punchier and more direct and I have a habit of repeating similar sentences and ideas.
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Bob is bob
How so?
Andy333
Andy333
A writing technique I tried using is when ever I wanted to show Amy or another character being mastered or in general showing mental instability of some kind, I would have them repeat themselves a lot of have sentences bleed together. Like for example- She wouldn't let them get away. She couldn't. She would break if they did.
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Bob is bob
That can get stale
Andy333
Andy333
Notice how choppy it is and how it's repeating similar sound words and ideas. It's a cool technique, but I use it too much and it can get confusing sometimes to read.
Andy333
Andy333
Exactly, stale is a great way to describe it. Plus I prefer the old Alice in Wonderland trick. Which in case you don't know that one, the actual Alice in Wonderland book used a lot of weird kinda out there similes and metaphors to show someone was crazy. Like for example, the mad hatter says, why is a raven like a writing desk.
Bob is bob
Bob is bob
Never read the OG book.
Andy333
Andy333
It's something that kind of makes sense, but also doesn't, and I use a couple of those to show if someone's drunk or being mastered. Like when Amy describes Vicky's aura like a burst of color and flavor. It's deliberately off putting and is designed to draw the attention of the reader.
Andy333
Andy333
Or when Sarah imagines herself as nothing more than a hole her hands could go through. Again it's deliberately off putting and its put in between more serious and grounded dialogue and thoughts to draw the reader's attention in. If that makes any sense?
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