Questionable Questing

It's not needed. Only wanted if you like that.

it's less the fictional language and more the culture if that makes sense. If dwarves or elves really did exist, they wouldn't be oddly shaped humans, they would have their own culture, beliefs, religion, legends, just completely alien world views from a normal person. But making a consistent world building for all of that is very difficult so most people don't do it.

We can only often write different reflections of humanity

You get my point though. Half the fun in any fantasy setting is exploring a brand new world.

That it is

Just remembered, been meaning to show you this. One of my favorite artists just put out this new Coffin of Andy and Leyley I know you'll like too.

And the guy who did Helltaker, the one about the guy fighting hell to make a harem of demonesses in business suits, just made another game recently about ghost girls.

Who the artist and I've seem it before and want a full multi page comic

Cathriellrue. Does a lot of incest with a particular focus on moms and their sons. Also has a kind of creepy, for a lack of a better word, art design that I like a lot.

Man of style. You big into Coffin of Andrew and Levy and what you like about the piece I did?

I like the art style and the fact the author has the balls big enough to publish it regardless of the backlash she knew she would receive, and yes the author is actually a girl funny enough, but like any new Indie developer I'm taking anything they do with a grain of salt. Been burned too many times with good games that get over hyped and then spend the next ten years in early access.

A girl. Go figure and what you like about my chapter?

I liked the dialogue and how snappy the action was. Too short for the characters and world building to get too established, but the loner damaged warrior/assassin girl is a fun trope for a reason as is seeing them get fixed through the power of love.

What did you like in the action? Any particular dialogue lines enjoyed?

Like I said before, you used older words and kept away from more modern ones even when describing the action sequences which is pretty challenging. It's all too easy to use words like explosive, wrenches, pistons, or other words like that which wouldn't fit the setting. Same with some of the dialogue.

You look wretched instead of you look terrible or asking if your okay is a great example.

How you enjoy the writing style?

What were weakness in the chapter?

The weakness is that it's too short. lol. There's really not much for me to say. Not much has happened except for a bar fight, and the MC acting like a Tsundere and a hint at her tragic backstory before she gets ready to play a drinking game. I know they're mercenaries who are celebrating, but I don't know why.

I don't know who their employer is. How much they make. What battles have they fought and why is it important. How many casualties they've had. How much war and chaos in general is the world around them going through. Lots of interesting unanswered questions.

Shortness doesn't leave room for investment.

How's my writing style?