The Unicorn
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Very nice and a musing section with a crackish view into the way some screwy goblins (that don't fit any of the previous depictions you have or the tone of the story) think.
Goblins enjoying a good bar fight and consider fighting together a good way for a couple to bond I can, sort of see, however given that they emphasize being armed and prepared at all times that would be an odd fit. Them appreciating betrayal or fighting for the sake of fighting does not make sense. For that matter the couple beating everyone does not make much sense in a culture where everyone enjoys fighting.
This line ruins all the good work you just did in establishing why magical cargo transport doesn't work. If the shrunken luggage has the same effects as the space expansion, then they shouldn't have had any shrunken luggage because it would be very uncommon and unusual to do something like that. If shrinking luggage is a way around the limit then we're back to magical trains making no sense.He stumped up to the entry area where one piece in particular of his shrunken luggage had been stowed in a cabinet outside the vehicle's reconfigurable area.
1)This is not how a working floppy drive sounds. If your floppy drive was making an "obnoxious shrieking", chances are it was about to eat your disk, destroying most of your data in the process.filling the room with that obnoxious shrieking, knocking buzz that could only be properly described as "the sound of a floppy drive"
2) Second, or even third hand used computers with internal hard drives would not be too difficult to find by 1990. Commodore 64 (which would be on their way out by this point) had hard drives available since at least the early 80s if not before.
3)Assuming he couldn't find a computer with an internal hard drive he could get without feeling he was exposing himself too much, connecting multiple floppy drives to a computer was easy which would make the setup simpler and remove the need to switch floppies like you have him doing.
While the computer bits were annoying, I really liked the theories the shadowland BBS came up with and them being around.A couple of Brits on the lam in the States, one an escaped experimental subject — a successful one, no less! — from some secret government lab and the other a black-haired preteen supersoldier? The world had to know!
I wouldn't think they'd need this sort of thing anywhere BUT along the interstate. Even today, after 9/11 and everything that followed from it you wouldn't need magic to cross the border without drawing any official attention, in 1992? You practically had to be looking for an official border crossing to get someone stopping you to look at your passport (and note that's just look, there was no border stamp). With magic? Transfiguring something that has a vague resemblance to a US or Canadian passport would get you through with no issue. In this time frame you'd have more trouble crossing the border from Nevada to California than US/Canada border (in either direction) because California actually had cops looking for people bringing in fruit."Regway on the most direct route. On the other hand, they're new here and unfamiliar with the road system. Following only major interstates would take them on I-29 up to Winnipeg and then over west. The closest bypass there would be..." he looked closely at the map, "...Walhalla. Regway or Walhalla, then, but which?"