I don't mind that each scene we pretty much see a year and half to two years of her life go by.
At first, the only thing that I disliked was that ceph nanotech. It was biting off far more than she was ready for. She also had no experience with it making stuff so there was a risk in how that would happen.
I didn't really mind her college stay. Her boot camp was meh could have been summed up in a sentence that it happened. The ship tour was meh.
What actually drags me down is the entire genius patrol. I'd actually like it if they lost her. They knew of her, but she was going to her public service so shouldn't really be back for 4 years or so. She seemed to get through that in a year.
I don't like that they met her on Earth. I'm fine with her doing a speed run through college. She already seemed to have 90% of it done. It was more one of those need to fill out a half year of required courses or a full year at worst. I can see the full year applying only because most schools would want the student having so many credits at their school rather than transferring in, and graduating like that.
Anyway, I dislike the entire chat with that rep from the GP. Didn't like it at all. Didn't really like her moralizing over getting rid of the sample she bought, but meh. Something Cliff's MCs always do.
I'd have liked her to have finished college and been now what? She was speed-running through things. She had her public service and college degree done. Now, she either needed to get hired by a local company ASAP, a megacorp, or join the military.
Sure, with her mind she should have been able to run her own company or been employable anywhere. Being drafted and sent to the same system as her parents wasn't needed. I could see her not having the money to visit them, missing them dearly, and not having any contacts to get an R&D job that she wants. So the choice would have been to take whatever job she could get ASAP to get by in life. Then she could figure out how to sell tech. Once she had a nest egg, she could start releasing more without having to work.
The only reason I could see her not staying on Earth is them going through a minor depression at the moment and hiring being difficult without the right contacts. Not something anyone likes to hear. She could spend an evening researching and being irked that joining the military was her best bet easily getting employed and also stationed where her parents were. She just needed to sign a short 5 year tour and it would have been over before she knew it.
Also, once she was out, she'd have a nest egg, be near her parents, and hopefully be able to take something to megacorp that would help things.
I'm not getting the Cold War stress factor. Something that I missed when I grew up in the 80s. Every time we see in her head, she is utterly panicked about this other human empire. That got old quick. The thing is that also makes us that have little knowledge of the setting think that next war will roll around in just a couple of months or maybe a year or two. Not like a decade or two out.
I can actually see her damn near forgetting about the forge. Or at least trying really hard to pretend it doesn't exist. She's not checking or anything mainly because that would mean having to think about it. Better to save those points for some massive future purchase. It's not like she really needs to buy anything right now anyway.
I'd have loved for the GP to only found her years later. You know after looking into why such and such megacorp was testing a new FTL method. Turns out that one of the people that they were supposed to be keeping an eye on was hired/contracted. So that's where she went!
Actually thinking about it, the GP would think that she was still in college somewhere. No sense for them to think she was speed-running through things.