This is the story of a world where the actions of a soul getting shoved into a dying person's...
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Expect a multi-chapter release sometime next week.
Please tell me where. I'll correct it right away.
Never mind, I've corrected it now.
Never mind, I've corrected it now.
Thank you for reading!
Toodles!
Can you please point me towards them?
The nerve of the ANBU, thinking the Sharingan wouldn't be able to detect them snooping on us with their pesky seals.
Reading the reports of yet another case being solved by the ANBU that should have actually been in our jurisdiction was the straw that broke the camel's back.
The civilians never saw us fighting the Kyuubi, just running away from it.
Never mind that we were the ones who carried the most civilians away from the battle sites, thereby saving them.
Trying to find any clue regarding this incident, he activated my Sharingan to see if he could see anything that he might have missed before.
Before he could look further though, he felt a pin pricking feeling on my neck.
Searching around for its source, he looked only to see Kakashi Hatake looking straight into my eyes.
I turned off his Sharingan and looked away immediately, breathing heavily.
Oof.... I'll get on correcting them ASAP.Those are all the ones that I've noticed in the Uchiha OF's POV.
Oof.... I'll get on correcting them ASAP.
Thank you for pointing that out.
I'm working on the chapter length.Interesting but so far we haven't gotten anything substantial. This could have been done in one chapter or two not three
I am not talking so much about the length but the fact that 3 chapters in we still don't even know whats the MCs personality. That is a pretty big detail, unless this story is all outside perspective?I'm working on the chapter length.
Please bear with me.
Thank you for reading.
Toodles!
I am new to writing so I am experimenting with different styles of writing and yes, the fanfic is NOT from the perspective of the MC.I am not talking so much about the length but the fact that 3 chapters in we still don't even know whats the MCs personality. That is a pretty big detail, unless this story is all outside perspective?
Ahh ok, then that does invalidate my previous comments, though the first dialogue in chapter 20+ is kind of crazy. You might want to state at the beginning of the story that it is outside perspectiveI am new to writing so I am experimenting with different styles of writing and yes, the fanfic is NOT from the perspective of the MC.
In fact, I don't think he'll have his first dialogue for the first 20 chapters or so.
Its just how my brain made me write it. Blame it not me.
Uh, yeah. I should probably do that.Ahh ok, then that does invalidate my previous comments, though the first dialogue in chapter 20+ is kind of crazy. You might want to state at the beginning of the story that it is outside perspective