Taylor Hebert is stuck in the locker and dies. Too bad for the rest of the world she doesn't...
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Yeah I plan on continuing. Thank you for liking it.
…maybe
Dead Space did come out in 2008 so their is a chance that she could of seen it, however it is more likely that she wouldn't have due to her age. Dead Space 2 however comes out on July 25, 2011 and this story does take place in the year 2011, so maybe Dead Space is an Earth Alpha import in 2011? I'll think about it... a lot of the story has origins in myths and media, Dead Space is one of its influences.Please for the love of all things holy and unholy have someone introduce Taylor to deadspace the amount of horribly hilarious shenanigans that our undead queen will get up to if she has that as a source of inspiration will be just perfect
Thanks
If it is in the wrong subforum, I have no idea how it would be moved...
It should probably be in the main Creative Writing forum, not the Creative Writing Index subforum. And I believe reporting your own post asking for the thread to be moved to the proper subforum is the standard practice in those cases.If it is in the wrong subforum, I have no idea how it would be moved...
… or which subform it would belong to either.
Okay thanksIt should probably be in the main Creative Writing forum, not the Creative Writing Index subforum. And I believe reporting your own post asking for the thread to be moved to the proper subforum is the standard practice in those cases.
Thanks for your critique! I've mostly just been trying to get the story on paper and out of my head. This is the first time I've ever written a story, let alone fanfiction, so it is good to know what I'm doing right and what I'm doing wrong. As for the prose I'm an amateur and my education is more towards Mathematics than English, I simply wished to write in the vague manner in which people think. It could honestly use some work, but I am just doing this for fun... Thanks again for the analysis!This... very much needs proofreading. The idea is quite interesting, I didn't see anything I overly objected to in plot or characterization... but the prose is nearly physically painful to try and parse.