Starry Eyes [Worm/Lovecraft Mythos]

[evildice]

She stared in for a good few moments, before letting out a rather nasal, "Jesus."

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Taylor: "Unlikely, though there's always the Book of Mormon."

Rune: "You must be joking."

Taylor: "Well they're both things that came back, right?"

Rune: "Great, now I'm physically and spiritually nauseous."

 

[Tortoise]

I didn't need them anymore, as lighting had flickered to life near the edges of the high ceiling.

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What "them"?

Its worm-like, dessicated, almost cancerous-looking body lay contorted atop the rubble, tumorous bulges in its flesh casting odd shadows.

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desiccated

 

[MissileTeatime]

When this popped up in my alerts, I had entirely forgotten that this was even on QQ. Clearly I followed it at some prior point, though.

And yesh, Starfall actually has a really rather terrifying master power, doesn't she? It's mostly a little buried under all the other stuff she's got going on, but the fact that it applies to human also...!

Four more times the tremors and booms resounded through the tunnels, none as strong or loud as the first. That fourth time, though, brought about more change than all the others before it.

I didn't need them anymore, as lighting had flickered to life near the edges of the high ceiling. Lighting that was clearly artificial in nature, but not in any way that I was familiar with. Pencil-thin lines of bright, sickly green light hung in the air in loosely coiled quadruple helixes with no apparent source, segments spinning lazily in alternating directions and separated by odd, glyph-like designs formed of the same light. In a few places the lines passed through stalactites to no apparent effect.

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The start of the second paragraph makes it really clear that something is missing in-between these two paragraphs. Could be a missing paragraph, could just be something missing from the start of the second paragraph.

 

[IdrisXY]

I didn't need them anymore, as lighting had flickered

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I let my lights fade into nothing, absorbing them as I looked around.

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Error: variable referenced before assignment.
Seems like the former statement was second before, and you forgot to reword it after reordering.

It's nice to see the accidental teenage Cthulhu is still kicking. Not sure how I feel about the fusion elements yet, but it can end up very fun.