Starfox5
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Took them long enough!
So the middle section is throwing me off because I couldn't tell who was voicing which lines.
I was going Harry (first line), Hermione (second line), Harry (third paragraph), Hermione (fourth paragraph)...and then Hermione again?
Thanks, I fixed that now!
Great update! Hopefully after the next scene (huzzah!) they remember the dogs and bloody scent trail they left on the way to their current location.
Well... they were a bit distracted.
Great stuff! very believable, working up the tension like that too.
I have absolutely no idea how they're going to save the captive girl tho.
They don't have any idea either. Not yet.
I mean they'd need a canon level asspull to pull it off. Especially now that they lost their stealth.
Don't underestimate them