The Lair of Godzilla [Godzilla/Everyday Life with Monster Girls] Multicross Fusion

Did some more editing for this chapter and past entries in the continuity.

For Cacophony, I emphasized slightly that Bunagi had a special connection to Elephants. The implication was that the poacher's going after elephants in particular was what made him react so violently to them. More on that will be revealed later, but it probably won't be in this storyline. Likely far later.

In general I tried to make the info dump on B's nature a bit less awkward to read, and fixed a few more spelling errors.

For TMF, I added some more ambiguity and history to the nature of Infant Island's human population, showing that there is some bias on the side of the in-universe narrator. I also added some a little more info on Hotuan culture and edited some lore on I Islands's wildlife. Godzilla: The Monarch Files [Kaiju Multicross Fusion] [COMPLETED] (Sequel is out)

 

I've been going over previous chapters and researching history while preparing to write the new installment. As I was looking over my notes, I considered how I portrayed the world in worldbuilding versus what was shown in the chapters, specifically MvM and Induction.

I have thought of it for awhile, but I struggled over how I could reconcile the prosperous looking modern day setting of Monster Musume with the post-Godzilla world. Since I got to post-1995, I've envisioned Japan as basically being a Mini-Catachan where every civilian has some degree of survival training, and where coastal cities are heavily reinforced by sentry guns and turret lines. Soldiers on patrol are a thing of daily life, yet it does not appear that way looking back to the reaction to the attack.

I feel I screwed up the worldbuilding in early chapters of TLOG with the depiction of the battle against Giger. With the tone it felt like this is a world where the kaiju have only recently begun to show up, not a world with over half a century of experience with giant monsters. Canon should have been changed far more by the timeline then it already has. I really feel I screwed up.

I'm thinking of rewriting the second and third chapters instead of just fixing spelling errors, of having a swarm of giant sea lice instead of just one. MON would ideally be introduced right in the middle of the action instead of at their apartment right before the battle.

Yet at the same time, could I still work with what I have? Come up with an explanation for why Asaka was seemingly untouched by the kaiju war until Giger attacked, perhaps because it's not right next to the ocean? Some other reason?

 

Change nothing.Once you start rewriting,you would never progress.I saw few good stories which ended that way.
And i like your story,so please continue without changes.

 

Okay. I might be able to explain more about the city and why it doesn’t appear to be as impacted as the lore indicates it should in the next chapter. First I deal with spelling errors and fix some dialogue.