Chapter One – Welcome to Vale
As I looked down upon the city through the airship window...
As I looked down upon the city through the airship window...
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Leingod | 5 |
Well, shit. I'm not gonna lie. I giggled a few times. I do appreciate a good bit of humour, and look forward to seeing where this goes.
That said, the only thing I'm a bit worried about is just how good the MC is a fighting, but that could be explained by the...Apparently... Numerous, fights he gets to, so that's neither here nor there. My only advice on that matter is to clarify a few times that, yes, this little shit does get into fights all the time. Maybe a flashback or two to some of his earlier ones where he got his ass kicked, and one or two where he kicked ass later on once he got better would be cool. The audience doesn't like some random guy who can curbstomp everybody else, but we sure do like somebody who worked hard at being able to curbstomp everyone else.
Otherwise, pretty cool, and I look forward to seeing more.
Wait, aren't you the guy who wrote ROYL? I'm a relatively new forumite, but I've lurked on that quest on SV; quite entertaining.
This one seems promising too, so I'll be watching this.