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Sneaking His Way into the Multiverse (RWBY Jaune, WC-lite mechanics)

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Agent Orange said:
Pet dinosaurs? Oversized weapons?
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The Food, the Mantles, the clutch claw could pair very nicely with rocket boosts. A suite of elemental weapons, potions that will fully heal a person and even increase their maximum health. Scoutfly lanterns, maybe even Kinsects. Jaune's not restricted to MH weapon limits. Shit, almost every consumable is amazing in mh. Cure poisons, lay traps that will paralyze enormous monsters, Demondrugs and armordrugs and dash potions... It's all fantastic.

And the New World guild as a whole are the most hard working, balls to the wall, endlessly positive support anyone could ask for. They'll be teaching Jaune more in a day than beacon would in a year. They'll be teaching Lisa how to be his handler. They're a perfect support group on this quest for power.
 
I wonder which power scale interpretation this is? The one we see in game, or in lore? Cause in certain interpretations of the lore regular tank shells from our world should bounce off of even the least monsters hide.

I don't It's that but it's still something to think about.
 
I would definitely put a Rathalos down as a lesser threat than the Hellkite. Hellkite's larger and capable of sustaining a longer lasting stream of fire over a larger area than Rathalos. On the other hand, that's assuming that it's just a Rathalos, and not also a Rathian. That would very quickly make the Hellkite seem like a cakewalk in comparison.
 
What's a Rathalos? Or a a Rathian for the matter? I mean I can guess from the context that they are monsters of some sort but what are they? Dinosaurs?
 
Holy shit, Monster Hunter, let's gooooo!!!! Man, MH being my favorite game series, I really wish the instance could be longer than one day. Sadge
 
They're one of the flagship monsters of monster hunter. Rathalos being a male, and Rathian a female, of the same species. They're a flying Wyvern - the forelegs are wings; the back legs are proper legs; Scaled like any wyvern. They both breathe fire, and have venomous stingers in their long tails. Typically, Rathians like to fight on the ground, biting and poisoning, while Rathians like to hover and burn. They both enjoy calling their mate to help them when they bite off more than they can chew, though. They're about the size of a bus, or thereabouts? 17m long, about 5 tall, about twenty meters wide with their wings out. The claws are about 50cm long, or about a foot and a half long in freedom units.

In short, fire breathing, poisonous, flying, sharp, tough bastards. And there's always two of em.

Edit: Rathians have poison tails, Rathalos has poisonous talons*
 
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Agent Orange said:
What's a Rathalos? Or a a Rathian for the matter? I mean I can guess from the context that they are monsters of some sort but what are they? Dinosaurs?
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Rathalos and Rathians are the male and female variants of the Rath wyvern respectively. They're not too massive (think a little bigger than a T. Rex) but they come with a whole lot of unique adaptations that make them pretty damn dangerous, especially in a pair. There's a lot to Raths that would take ages to explain, but the gist of it is this (MonHun bros correct me if I get anything wrong):

Rathalos -> Males; adapted best for flight, and as such typically have large wings and smaller legs (this is not the case for the New World Rathalos, the native to the area Jaune and Lisa currently find themselves in. These have beefy legs); their feet and talons are similar to those of falcons/hawks, so they can grip and slash at prey with them.

Rathian -> Females; adapted best for the ground, and as such have thicker legs but smaller wings. They're also equipped with venomous barbs and the like that run down the lengths of their bodies. Rathalos lack this feature.

Edit: Rathalos illustration

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LazyAutumnMoon said:
Five minutes later, he ate those words.

"Sooo?" Tattletale, smugly smugging, flourished her hands at the pack of dinosaurs grazing on the vegetation.

"...You're right."

She preened. "Always am, nihihi~."
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I genuinely love how Lisa is getting the realistic woobie treatment while still retaining most of her shithead, bad person traits (most of that being a teen kek). She's definitely better with Jaune no doubt, reading the trust in their partnership grow has been my favorite part of the story.

I don't know if her conflict drive is being whammied getting isolated from the Shard network or the new data is so exotic that Negotiator is bliss-ed out but whatever is the case its doing her a world of good. Thanks for the chapter!
 
Yes! They can get Palicos! New additions to Jaune's group!

Enjoyed the domestic experience and rocket boots playtime with the Blondes. They're so silly. It was a nice break, narratively and from an in character view.

Also, first, I thought Jurassic park or world. Then Kashyyyk. Then the MonHun made itself apparent with the giant tree description. Fun reading!

And the view, oh my. Waterfalls, exotic flowers, a rainbow across a pond […]
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Disclaimer that I'm not a beta or even a writer but I've occasionally seen small occasions where you add in a small bit of 1st-ish person descriptors during some parts, @TheTangerineCat.

It's not flow-breaking or anything. I think most people easily bypass it. But if it matters, you might wanna change things like that to something like: 'and the view… incredible.' Or some adjective. Just wanted to bring it to your attention.

Other than that, enjoying your work as always and looking forward to how they deal with Monsters!
 
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Nice, thanks for catching that.
Phone+google docs+firefox= 3 different autocorrects deciding I'm wrong.

Party2tehArth said:
Disclaimer that I'm not a beta or even a writer but I've occasionally seen small occasions where you add in a small bit of 1st-ish person descriptors during some parts, @TheTangerineCat.

It's not flow-breaking or anything. I think most people easily bypass it. But if it matters, you might wanna change things like that to something like: 'and the view… incredible.' Or some adjective. Just wanted to bring it to your attention.

Other than that, enjoying your work as always and looking forward to how they deal with Monsters!
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Eh, that one generally seems fine going by other writings. In third person limited, the narration and the main character's thoughts can experience a certain amount of bleed-over without being an explicit italicized thought, things like 'My,' / 'oh my' / 'methinks' / using 'you' in places. They convey tone and emotions well, and in a concise manner.
Using something like '...incredible' works, though there are also a whole different set of considerations in regards to ellipses, since, like the em dash, they often pull double, triple, even quadruple duty in my writing for a variety of situations and could quickly become overused.
 
Yep. Like I said not a big deal. Just wasn't sure if it was something subconscious or not and wanted to bring it up in case.

Appreciate the explanation though and looking forward to more!
 
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