Questionable Questing

And with Miss Dallon, I want to clear up some of the structural issues, reintroduce some of the forgotten plots points like the one with Bakuda, I want to go more in-depth into Amy's experiments with bio engineering, really explore how inhuman everyone becomes over time. Plus I want greg's family to have a much bigger impact on the story and help influence how he go to that point.

You up for side kick Greg?

Amy in charge

Maybe. it could be an interesting dynamic. One of my big complaints with Greg is that while he is a terrifying villain, he was a hideously incompetent one. So either he become a much bigger threat or his role in the story changes.

Hit me up on the og story of Greg and Amy. I only ever saw pieces of the fic.

really long story short, Greg makes a friend with this girl at school, falls hard for her, and when he asks her out she rejects him destroying their friendship in the process. Greg doesn't take that well or the subsequent bullying form the girls friends who think he's a creep because he couldn't let this girl go and kept approaching her.

He has a mental breakdown, triggers with the power of a mind control tinker, and sets his sights on Vicky and Amy since their heroes, popular, and rich, which are the three things greg thinks he wants, but truthfully his ego's been hurt and he's trying to find a replacement for that one girls he's still crushing on.

And this girl was Amy? I could see a potential growth here where she rejects him and he acts both sympatheticly sad but also a prick and she calls him out on it while bringing up their friendship and forces him to realize how important it is

Greg slowly figures out his powers and starts to have more of an influence on the Dallon family, causing them to slowly fall into a lesbian orgy, but since he's too chicken shit to approach them he doesn't realize this. Until eventually he reaches the point of no return, does some really fucked up things in the heat of the moment and that finally gives him the push to finally claim the Dallon family for himself.

I read the rest now. Thinking. I am if you like it wondering if combine the girl he has crush on who's his first friend with Amy and have it serve as a lesson to him before she and him go off the rails. Or have it that he is planning on mind controlling the girl, but falls into a friendship with Amy and approaches it differently after he got rejected and ruined his first friendship

He targets Amy because she alone at the hospital and he thinks she's the weakness, he corners her and is about to rape her, when she gains the upper hand and kills him, and in the process of this whole thing happening he traumatized Amy enough that she has a bit of a mental breakdown at the realization her whole relationship with her family was built on a lie, and goes full red queen to keep them.

And the girl wasn't Amy it was literally just a random girl at school that felt pity on him and decided to try and be his friend. The entire point of it was to show that their are millions of Greg's out their that if given the power to mind control people would go down a very dark path.

I am going to be honest. I am not a fan of this Greg as I do not jive with the loser nerd portrayal. But it is your story. You tell me what you like in a Greg and whatever that I will build around for feedback

Greg's purpose was to be the antagonist for the first half, but more importantly to turn Amy into a monster so she could take over as the primary antagonist for the rest of the story.

My entire goal with him was too be the push Amy needed to go full Red Queen mode. because despite what the fandom thinks, it took a lot for Amy to break down in canon and I knew what needed to happen for her to get to that point had to be as equally horrifying or her transformation wouldn't feel earned.

There is the evil friend, the guy who isn't her sex buddy but wheedles her into corrupting and training that girl he wants and in the process he pushes her to do it to her family. Whenever she has doubts about how awful what she is starting to do is, he Is there. The dorky monster to say just, more. let it happen. Enjoy yourself Amy. You deserve it. Insidious while being supportive

That could work too, and if I played my cards right could be even creepier than the original.

Amy allows Greg to steer her while she provides reality. She has him start thinking do you just want one girl? Greg, buddy, what ambitions do you have? What do you want, and is it going to make you better? My thought would be they both make each other stronger and more dangerous as they start to take over Brockton. Greg suggesting to Amy well why not make Lung a woman and have him become your dragon bitch?

Greg has the ideas and audacity. Amy the super hero knowledge and grit

Amy jealous of Dean having her sister turns him into a femboy for Greg while Greg fucks with hospital staff to be more thankful to Amy