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A New Player in the Force (SW/Lite Gamer)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by USSExplorer, Apr 24, 2020.

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  1. Solusandra

    Solusandra Foxes are Fantastic

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    compared to the clonewars showing how the order was ripping itself appart, and ending with 99% of jedi being executed? I fail to see where he could do worse.

    And fixing the Jedi order would involve trauma counciling and removing the rod from their ass, so, yeah, he's on the right path.
     
  2. Zendrelax

    Zendrelax "All yours. I think it always was. Welcome home."

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    So. If Shatterpoint ignores the surface-level writing and themes of its own source material, then that's my problem? Sure buddy.
     
  3. Ame

    Ame Not too sore, are you?

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    As much as I'm enjoying this, at this point it's left the question of 'Can this story's version of Mace Windu fall?' And Migrated to 'Can any interpretation of Mace Windu Fall?' And that belongs in the general starwars thread and not here. So it might be a good idea to move to that one before it hits derail territory.
     
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    USSExplorer

    USSExplorer Doing what's necessary, even if it causes chaos

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    General images for things related to Cam.
    (I will try to remember to add to this as time goes by)

    If someone wants to make better images, feel free to do so. These are just rough guides.
    Pre-teen
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    Around Naboo
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    Fanart
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    Do remember this is 80 to 100m in length rather than the ~40m from the ships seen in TCW
    Colours and markings
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    Weapon loadout
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  5. Ame

    Ame Not too sore, are you?

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    Cool pictures there. Love the pendant. And I must say, Cam is a rather pretty young man.
     
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  6. USSExplorer

    USSExplorer Doing what's necessary, even if it causes chaos

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    Aye. Though given I'm using Kate Beckingsale as the image for his mother, Revan (Keanu Reeves) was a great-granddaddy, and he a Gamer (even if it's a very light system) that's not a big surprise ;)
     
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  7. ChiChi

    ChiChi I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    missing"
    tests
    missing text?
    this was where?
    the phrasing is off but I'm not sure of which way to fix it was intended
    I think this is missing a comma or two
    if I've been placed?
    do not stand out?
    misplaced space
    2*lvl what? inches? feet? meters? miles?
    trials?
    extra spaces
    a bit this year
    after I got into a fight
    girl who jumps?
    can't beat others
    your light shine brighter?
    from making waves?
    from the way you worded the first post he should be suffering severe penalties from having hunger at 0
    not high enough?
    trial?
    as he leaned forward?
    reversed?
    that we were to leave?
    to hide long
    phrasing is rather poor here
    unacceptable?
    until a thought? also missing period I think
    the word is 'percent' not 'per cent'
    percent of my FP
     
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  8. Hammerfury

    Hammerfury Know what you're doing yet?

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    No. It ignores the themes of your headcanon.
    However, it has been pointed out we're moving slightly off topic. If you want to discuss this further we could do this on Discord and voice chat instead of risking Mods getting involved.
     
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  9. Solusandra

    Solusandra Foxes are Fantastic

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    ignores the themes of one fanfic (shatterpoint) writers for another (This ones).
     
  10. Hammerfury

    Hammerfury Know what you're doing yet?

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    I repeat, slightly off topic. Wanna continue this, dm me.
     
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  11. Ayashi

    Ayashi Connoisseur.

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    Pretty sure that's the point.

    if you move the circle a little bit down it kinda looks a bit like a tie fighter, doesn't it?
     
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  12. LuciferBael

    LuciferBael Mand'alor Te Talyc

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    You realize the EU(ie books like Shatterpoint) are the canon this story is based in right. . . . .
     
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  13. Solusandra

    Solusandra Foxes are Fantastic

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    You realize there's a higherarchy right? Shit USSE makes up, the six movies, then the EU, and maybe disney if it's useful; in that order. And shatterpoint is contradicted by both the movies and Cam's recent force vision; both of which are on a higher tier.
     
  14. LuciferBael

    LuciferBael Mand'alor Te Talyc

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    You realize I'm part of the team that helps him make it right. . . . the EU is above the movies in this story and that Vision doesn't contradict Shatterpoint
     
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  15. Solusandra

    Solusandra Foxes are Fantastic

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    The vision has Windu falling in at least 1 major timeline. If shatterpoint says he can't or won't, then it's in contradiction.
     
  16. LuciferBael

    LuciferBael Mand'alor Te Talyc

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    Shatterpoint doesn't say that though
     
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  17. Megaolix

    Megaolix Moderator

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    You realize you are derailing the hread, right?
     
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  18. ChiChi

    ChiChi I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Were there multiple Sellena's? because a quick search shows Sellena having died years ago and later speaking in the current time and then her dying in the big attack on the city

    It'd be nice to have a central listing of the various powers/perks/etc that he has or can purchase if he has the points and what they do.

    as best I recall most of your typos were missing or extra spaces or quotation marks ... if there are any quoted sections that the typo isn't obvious feel free to point out which ones and I'll take another look and elaborate










     
  19. USSExplorer

    USSExplorer Doing what's necessary, even if it causes chaos

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    There are two. Bo and Satine's mother and their sister in law. In-verse, it's weird that their brother married someone with their mother's name. Out-of-verse, I missed it until a few chapters after both were named and just let it go. Few people spotted it.

    The index tab has his stats at the end of certain arcs. I don't do it every arc though. As for what the powers do, generally, they match something you'd find on the wiki (though trusting that place is a dangerous thing to do) but not always.

    I'll likely have to go through those, and ones by others, whenever I get around to publishing this story over on SpaceBattles of Sufficient Velocity... whenever that'll be
     
  20. ChiChi

    ChiChi I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    That's his stats I was asking about his abilities like the mini map the enhanced mini map enlarge ... etc ... having both the names and descriptions all in a single post weather or not he has bought the ability
    though come to think of it would be nice to have a central repository of all the alternate language vocabulary used as well cause there were a few mandoan words that I couldn't find what exactly they meant I mean I got a general idea from the context but it would be nice to be able to look it up
     
  21. Narratiuncula

    Narratiuncula Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    Lmao, I was literally so surprised when I read it had been Mace in the vision. Also, damn, I read this fic in a one-setting and it's by far the best star wars fandic (if not the best SI fanfic) I've ever read! I can't wait for more :)
     
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  22. USSExplorer

    USSExplorer Doing what's necessary, even if it causes chaos

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    Ah. I actually prefer to keep things vague about what the perks can/could do. Allows me some wiggle room for writing.
    Though the minimap has been stated a few times to have a range of 1km. Options from Perks could be extended that if taken and his Dectection has a much greater range, which just adds clumps of sensed beings etc at the edges of the map.

    For ease, I use these sites (and others) along with a doc on my comp given to me by one of the backroom. Most of the words cane be found in the sites below but the curses are extra
    https://starwarslanguages.fandom.com/wiki/Mando'a_-_Advanced
    http://mandoa.org/
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  23. Qawsed

    Qawsed Not too sore, are you?

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    Just wanted to ask if there was any way that you could list the missing skills/and or skill lvls needed to open up locked skills.
     
  24. USSExplorer

    USSExplorer Doing what's necessary, even if it causes chaos

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    I'll do so with the next stat update. Which, if time permits, I'll get to in a few days (I hope).
    Though it's mainly only Force Powers that are locked. Skills did have stat limiters (I think), but Cam's blown past them with ease.
     
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  25. Qawsed

    Qawsed Not too sore, are you?

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    That was the ones I was looking for so thanks. One last question, SP= stat points? And SKP= skill upgrade points?
     
  26. USSExplorer

    USSExplorer Doing what's necessary, even if it causes chaos

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    Aye
     
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  27. USSExplorer

    USSExplorer Doing what's necessary, even if it causes chaos

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    I case I forget though:

    Tutaminis: Until Deflection => Master 1
    Alter Mind: Until Compulsion => Savant 1, Mind Probe + Telepathy => Professional 1
    Dominate Mind: Until Telepath, Alter Mind and Mind Probe => Master 50
    Lightsaber Telekinesis: Until TK, Lightsaber [style], Makashi, Soresu, Shien, Djem-So are all => Master 1
    Repulse/Shockwave: Until Wave =>Professional 1
     
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  28. D King Hecht

    D King Hecht Know what you're doing yet?

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    Did Cameron level up for defeating the elite mooks of the Mandos?
     
  29. Qawsed

    Qawsed Not too sore, are you?

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    May the 4th be with you.
     
  30. LuciferBael

    LuciferBael Mand'alor Te Talyc

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    Elite? If you mean the three in the tower at the end those were elite, the rest were DW conscripts that had like 6 months training
     
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