pepperjack
A Variety of Cheese
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Why no, I never have! Thank you for the revelation, sensei, my life has been changed. My total inexperience in this matter must be why it didn't come across that way, for surely there is no other explanation.Or have you never been introduced to this sort of behavior before in your life?
The other thing that bothered me was the prevalence of "fuck." In Sentinel 9.6, a chapter of over 5,400 words told from Shadow Stalker's (3rd person) perspective, "fuck" appears eleven times. In Amelia 395, a chapter of under 2,100 words told from Shadow Stalker's (1st person) perspective, "fuck" appears twenty-two times.
Maybe that's justified by whatever reason you're about to pull out, but I hope you understand why it struck me as though there was an awful lot of "fuck" in this chapter.