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Governor's Gambit - Star Wars SI into Imperial Governor

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Huh, I totally thought the little girls name was going to be Biboo.

But I guess not everyone watches vtubers. Oh well.
 
This might sound really rude, but I don't think you need to worry about being accused of AI writing. To be blunt, you have too many mistakes to be writing with a machine. LOL.

I also don't think AI would be so obsessed with various fan-created vehicles and ships, which is a unique emphasis of your story.

In short, the story has personality, and that is clear to see.
 
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Now" said the Professor, "Edin City sits on top of a large plateau.
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Surrounding the plateau are many fields, with large, deep canyons and ravines cutting through the landscape
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Oh good, so Edin is grasslands with a lot of caves and fissures? This is gonna be Geonosis caves 2 electric boogaloo isn't it?

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When Grand Admiral Thrawn had requested a spy be placed in Minda
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she was still a loyal member of the Ascendancy, and her duty came before her personal life
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Huh? I thought Thrawn was an exile?

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She hummed, taking a sip of a Mindan chocolate drink. This place was nice. Quite-

The doors to her office opened, a lone, darkish blue rubber ball bouncing past.

-strange, but nice.
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Is there something going around in the background turning people into rubber balls?
 
It would be cool to have an F-S rank system for martial skill in the mercenary section as experience doesn't always equate to skill so maybe have them fight two people of they're current rank and if they win then they fight someone of the rank they want and if they can fight them to a standstill, win or impress the evaluator then they rank up
(You can give examples of the ranks like Darth Vader being like EX)
 
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It would be cool to have an F-S rank system for martial skill in the mercenary section
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No, those systems are always retarded and offer no actual information on how good a person is at doing a job, just do a regular novice->apprentice->adept etc. with specific fighting styles or a local arena "everyone can challange everyone" thing if you want a ranking that badly, leave the japanese shit in the japanese shit bin since that's where their poorly thought out systems belong
 
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RIP Thrawn.
Looks like one Arc end...
Another is about to begin.

And I love that people are getting something good here.
Education, social mobility, economic security, and general happiness.
A very, very great place to live!

And of course the perspectives.
Very nice.
A dedicated student, a loyal secretary/interim-governor, and a spy that is enjoying their assignment.
Yes, a peaceful chapter I'd say.
 
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No, those systems are always retarded and offer no actual information on how good a person is at doing a job, just do a regular novice->apprentice->adept etc. with specific fighting styles or a local arena "everyone can challange everyone" thing if you want a ranking that badly, leave the japanese shit in the japanese shit bin since that's where their poorly thought out systems belong
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1.That's why I said as a separate ranking system for martial skill while the first is experience and reliability
2. He biased the guild on the adventures guild concept
3. Anime and manga are where more than half the stories on this site come from
 
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He biased the guild on the adventures guild concept
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If you didn't know, the concept of a group of merchants/craftsmen/mercs coming together to have greater bargaining power and calling themselves a guild is not new, in fact it's very old and

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3. Anime and manga are where more than half the stories on this site come from
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It doesn't mean that the blatantly inane ideas (that stop making sense after thinking about them for more than a minute) they love parroting don't deserve to be hated & improved upon as is the case (in my opinion) with the current system & ranking the MC currently has in place
 
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