Fulcon
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You're telling me. I thought I was done, but it turns out, Muse had different ideas.
She just really likes this story and I've got no idea why.
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Hey, so I'm working on the next chapter.
Covid-19 was the absolute worse time for a sabbatical but it let me recharge my batteries. Had a lot of time to think, which is important.
The worst part about getting into this fic again after so long was remembering all the numbers, even if I kept a running character-sheet to make it easier.
The above was a fix for chapter 7, a spectacularly dumb line that had to be changed.
I'll go into more detail about how I've cleared the roadblocks in the next chapter, when or even if I get it finished.
Thank you for your patience, all. Here's a plate of cookies, take one to nibble on as you wait.![]()
Fulcon, I don't know if you answered this question, but what are your thoughts on Boruto?
Hey, so I'm working on the next chapter.
Covid-19 was the absolute worse time for a sabbatical but it let me recharge my batteries. Had a lot of time to think, which is important.
The worst part about getting into this fic again after so long was remembering all the numbers, even if I kept a running character-sheet to make it easier.
The above was a fix for chapter 7, a spectacularly dumb line that had to be changed.
I'll go into more detail about how I've cleared the roadblocks in the next chapter, when or even if I get it finished.
Thank you for your patience, all. Here's a plate of cookies, take one to nibble on as you wait.![]()
oh thank God, I thought you'd gone off to become a mountain hermit and died of covid bears or drop wolves
It kinda feels like an unnecessary sequel since most of the problems was solved at the end of Naruto. I also kinda hate how they made Naruto, the guy who would literally lose his arm for a friends and do whatever he can to help them, be a neglectful father. I mean seriously, he actually send in his shadow clone to spend time with his family, who does that.I haven't seen it, so I cannot give an opinion. For discussion fodder, what are yours?
It kinda feels like an unnecessary sequel since most of the problems was solved at the end of Naruto.
I also kinda hate how they made Naruto, the guy who would literally lose his arm for a friends and do whatever he can to help them, be a neglectful father.
I mean seriously, he actually send in his shadow clone to spend time with his family, who does that.
Yeah, that's a bit of a problem when you tell a complete story - no need for a sequel.
As devil's advocate, parents tend mimic the way they were parented to their kids (at least I think they do). Since Naruto was, well, neglected for most of his life, I can see him adopting a...kinder neglect? Does that make sense? Neglecting his kids but sending clones so its not 'too' neglectful?
I disagree with that opinion. I think that if a person who was neglected for majority of their childhood managed to get a family they would probably pamper their kid because they wouldn't want their children to feel what they themselves felt.
Sorry for the run on sentence.
Well, my father was neglected and abused as a child.
He was a neglectful and semi-abusive parent.
But I recognize that it's a small sample-size.
Ouu, any chance of us seeing the character sheet?The worst part about getting into this fic again after so long was remembering all the numbers, even if I kept a running character-sheet to make it easier.
Good to hear from you again, good sir! Happy to see that you're still kicking : )
Character Sheet: Shimoda Daisuke.
Health: 230.
Chakra: 85.
S.P.E.C.I.A.L Stats:
Strength: 4
Perception: 7 (+2)
Endurance: 5
Charisma: 7 (+6)
Intelligence: 10
Agility: 5
Luck: 10
Taijutsu (Endurance): 80
Melee Weapons (Strength): 15
Ranged Weapons (Agility): 29
Genjutsu (Perception): 33
Ninjutsu (Endurance): 29
Speech (Charisma): 36
Barter (Charisma): 27
Sneak (Agility): 17
Pick Lock (Perception): 21
Fuinjutsu (Intelligence): 44
Medicine (Intelligence): 27
Survival (Perception): 37
Chakra Control (Intelligence): 92
Perks:
Taijutsu Enthusiast
Comprehension
Educated
Good for you, keep to your own pace and don't let others stress you out.
Meanwhile, I think this sentence has the skill/req skill mixed.
Though I had to mental recount which story I was in for a moment there.
Basically the system let's him train to obtain growthI think a good end game perk would be unlimited growth and system stop helping him with perks and mastery points and he gains the ability to train and gain stuff normally and if he want something like will of fire figures out how to do it with fujitsu or ninjutsu
I think a good end game perk would be unlimited growth and system stop helping him with perks and mastery points and he gains the ability to train and gain stuff normally and if he want something like will of fire figures out how to do it with fujitsu or ninjutsu
Basically the system let's him train to obtain growth
Yay! I just finished rereading this piece of art and I must reiterate, love your writing and concept. Don't worry about the continuity, it flowed just right, atleast from the perspective of someone reading through all of the chapters in a row! Looking forward to where you take this from here!
I'm not saying he wouldn't have serious holes in his parenting style. I'm saying the holes he got in canon are the incorrect holes.
I love bringing in Gai's team early as a sort of early measuring stick for the non-geniuses.
I love introducing Neji to not just being an underdog, but being OPENLY TOYED WITH! Shit that boy is going to have a fucking meltdown, and even I can't reasonably predict what you'll do with it with high confidence.
Does he slot this into his fate coping mechanism, and just believe he was outclassed? With victory never being an option? Does his raw distaste for his position beat the concept of predetermination coping out of him as he rails against what he can no longer ignore as a shitty hand? Does he retract further into his shell, becoming even shittier than canon at least in the short term to be an even easier to hate antagonist when he bumps up against Naruto? Does he think his current methods are ineffective, and start seeking help from people around him instead of walking the path of loner prodigy?
Some combination of the above? It is just actually a chaos bomb. Naturally, I'm going to assume that was intentional. It gives you a lot of freedom to make widely different choices that all make sense to take the story in different directions. This is before even talking about how that little display effects the other team Gai relationships.
How does Daisuke interact with Lee? Does he profess respect for his physical training, and determination? Perhaps bring up that Lee is almost perfectly his opposite? After all Lee advances through physical training, fighting skill, and nothing else, while Daisuke gets better by doing literally every other conceivable aspect of self improvement? Each has what the other lacks.
Could even start offering tips to Lee about how Neji's anger is a weakness, and how to better exploit holes in his form? I say this because while Lee can't do jutsu tricks he could be trained to be a more observant, tactical martial artist.
Wait shit. If Daisuke antagonizes Neji but befriends Lee, how does Naruto react? Irrational jealousy of Lee for seemingly taking the place he used to have? Irrational because Naruto was actively trying to get out of that shadow?
On a less intimate note, Nichiren's trapper has a lot of overlap with Tenten's specialty in all ranges of weapon with basic fuinjutsu, and I absolutely want them to to take notes from each other to improve. Tenten setting fuinjutsu traps is nasty even if she's only pulling explosions, and weapon launching. Kami forbid she starts integrating ninja wire for complexity. Meanwhile even basic ranged competence would allow Nichiren some serious harassment game to keep people at a distance, and off balance for his traps.
Pretty sure our dear Hiruzen got all the same mistrustful signals as before in that conversation, but a combination of evidence, and past regret for not trusting Daisuke made him rather forcefully not act on that instinct again. In other words his gut is mistrustful, but his head is saying his gut is being an idiot. He chose to listen to his head with corroboration form the others.
Maybe I should explain what I meant by head and gut. Yes admitting your primary loyalty isn't the village isn't the mandated party line. Thing is though, he stated his primary loyalty was to his friends, and teammates. Does Hiruzen think he's lying about the second half, but not the first? Does he think the GROUP is a flight risk? Is he insane enough to think the majority of people under his command think of loyalty to abstract concepts like village over PEOPLE that they know in said village? I'd expect Danzo to demand that. I'd expect Hiruzen to think of that as Danzo thinking, and to be against it in principle.
Further still he made the logical deduction based on that last mission that, NO, Daisuke isn't working the guy that just came uncomfortably close to killing him multiple different ways in a harrowing mission you'd expect to turn a fresh genin to a gibbering wreck.
Even further still he openly demanded to know the judgement of all other involved parties which is the very definition of a move designed to limit the effects of personal bias on decision making.
The methodology, and what we can see of his thought process, screams logic. Cool, non rash decision making. In future I could easily see him asking probing questions, like if there is no memory, why is the cypher/language the same? Where did it come from? He might speculate that Daisuke is like Yamato. Created by a traitor/enemy, but very much not aligned with them.
In short? He seemed like a methodical man with his hackles raised. Not an emotional man trying to ignore evidence.