The Skittering Chaos Chapter 1 (Rewrite)
After some critique was brought forward about my...
After some critique was brought forward about my...
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They way I see it, Taylor's became something of a problem solver during her cape career. She can identify the problem and works towards solving it. How do you stop anarchy in the streets? By calling in overwhelming government force, and if there is no government, then conquer, and make things better yourself. This was part of why Taylor maintained her territory after the goal of saving Dinah was achieved. Brockton Bay was still a shit hole and the government still hadn't fixed up even most of the city and she could do some good by maintaining her territory and helping her people.Yes!
this is good!
I like the weirdly wholesome thing you've got with the dead merchants.
I can't think of any criticisms right now, too tired to even try and find grammar stuff.
But I'll definitely be rereading tomorrow, So i'll be sure to be on the lookout.
Also i like taylor already thinking about how to conquer her own little slice of hell!
I'm loving this idea, but please decide whether you're writing in past or present tense and stick with it.We climb up the stairs and enter into the loft of the warehouse. For a second I'm seeing the Undersider's loft, but as we keep ascending I see more of the room and the false image of the loft disappears. I… Did I really miss the Undersiders that much? Granted, true be told, despite it being the apocalypse, I think the last time I really could say that I enjoyed myself was while we were trying to fight Zion. Just during the down time, when I could sit with my old team. I think that over the past two years or so, I hadn't smiled, really smiled and meant it until I got to see my friends again.
I'm glad your enjoying it. I made this as sort of my own interpretation of how Taylor would interact with hell as well as a Taylor that was more in character than Raven's Taylor. Part of the reason I didn't just continue the Omake that started this all is because I didn't want to try to stay loyal to Ravens Taylor-in-name-only and was mildly annoyed at a few of them saying that Taylor was out of character from the fic Taylor.I really like this so far and am pretty jazzed that someone else is doing this crossover. Ravens' was fun, but honestly had no real substance much like pretty much all of his post OW crossover work.
A lotta capes died in Gold Morning, even after Khepri took over. The story is bound to get out as people learn that Skitter is in Hell.I can't wait until Taylor tells every cape in Hell what she did.
And they all shit themselves in fear and panic.A lotta capes died in Gold Morning, even after Khepri took over. The story is bound to get out as people learn that Skitter is in Hell.
Or they try to gang up on her... Or join her...
Probably join her after she beats the crap out of the strongest ones.
At the moment because I also want to post this on Spacebattles there are not likely to be any planned lewds at the moment. That might change later however.i hope there is lewds but i love plot before lewds so i can wait hers hoping that taytay is bisexual
I've always kind of looked at the Merchants with pity since I first was shown how they were in Worm. We never get much characterization about Squealer within the story and Skidmark is similarly missing in who he is in the past. They are relatively blank slates that I think could have done well with a kind of restart. Way I see it, the Merchants kind of know that what they were doing were ruining their bodies and lives, it's just addiction is a hard thing to stop when your hooked, add in that their lives are super stressful what with being capes in a weak gang, drugs seem like a good place to drown your sorrows and stress in. As I see it, when given a new demonic body, they may still have the intellectual craving for their brand of drug, but no actual physical sensation of needing it, it's a new body after all. So add in that they don't really have a way of getting the drug without breaking shit, and that the compulsion isn't very strong, it'd be easy to get off of the hard stuff that would ruin their lives again, and only really go for the mild stuff. Add in Demonic constitution, and I don't think drugs are as harmful in hell and need to kind of be upgraded to get the same effect on a demon as it would a human. Hence why the Weed had a strange tinge to it that Taylor could smell with her Antennae.I will find you, and when I do I will shake your hand. I am loving how this is going and I can't wait to see what you will do next. The fact that the Merchants found her and can be considered relatively decent was a heck of a surprise that turned out sweet.
Maybe hell is a multiuniverse expanding dimension meaning its every hell in every world, and I remember helluva boss pointing that the demons have, well the powerful older ones, have methods to return to the world of the living, but what if you can do crossovers? or be summoned by a mage in another setting? Be kinda cool for Taylor to suddenly be in Magic the gathering or something.
I've gone over the two story posts and cleaned up some of the tenses, though I'm sure I missed some. In either case, there shouldn't be enough changed to bother looking over again just to see what changes I've made since 90% of them are just changing the past tense to the present.
While that would be cool and could be the subject of authorial omakes, I don't plan on the main story ever really going into more cross overs since the more cross overs, the more rules of different universes I would have to follow as well as incorporate into the story, otherwise it's just frivolous fluff that isn't useful to the story. While my opinion might change on this, I don't expect to really include anything else other than Hazbin Hotel, and Worm with an eventual cross with Ward.
That's an interesting idea that I hadn't really thought of. Might be interesting and now I already have something of an idea. Stolas, a demon of the upper class in hell has access to the mortal realms and all that, why shouldn't Valentino?Alright no massive crossovers, but how about just keep crossing over with worm?
Like Taylor gets summoned by someone in worm who believed in the occult and the timeline is a year before her trigger, although reports saying Scion has gone missing, so it points to a world that didnt had the golden morning, but still has parahumans running amok.
That's an interesting idea that I hadn't really thought of. Might be interesting and now I already have something of an idea. Stolas, a demon of the upper class in hell has access to the mortal realms and all that, why shouldn't Valentino?
Oh it is, I was referring to before that. For example, who's to say that the demon Overlords don't have their hands in other pies elsewhere?Wasn't this originally an omake of Wannabee that had demon taylor summoned by a khepri cult during ward to unfuck it?
Thought that was gonna stick around.
Oh it is, I was referring to before that. For example, who's to say that the demon Overlords don't have their hands in other pies elsewhere?
Granted I'm still thinking over whether to introduce going to the mortal realm before that point. Though for the most part I can't see it without it just sorta being weird one offs that I'm not sure fit.
Do they? I was never sure, I sorta assumed but I've yet to make the time to get through the various streams the Viziepop has. Granted I've had less than a day to think this over so I've yet to fully make up my mind on it and how I might implement it.Hey hazbin demons get stronger by making deals, if Taylor is gonna fix hell she's gonna need a lot of power.
I thought that was just an alastor thing, did Vizy mention that in a stream?Hey hazbin demons get stronger by making deals, if Taylor is gonna fix hell she's gonna need a lot of power.