GLH
Really?
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Ok, after way too long of a delayed response, I return with feedback. Ahem. First, you should have used the Harry Potter defense when you first encountered issues over on SB and SV with the accusations thrown at your story. Like THIS and THAT link so helpfully show, the claim is laughable.
Second, there is little else I can comment on here that others have not brought up themselves, and you are doing a damned fine job with what I have seen so far. The only thing that stands out is Ino not digging for 'harmless' info regarding the summon clan her sister is associated with (like which of the rats Rei summons are complete assholes, and which are ok'ish as individuals, as an example). That just seems odd given her feelings and opinions of them. Yes, she doesn't like them, but she also knows that she can't turn Rei away from them, so I can see Ino trying (and miserably failing) to keep an eye on the more assholish ones while trying to make some inroads with some of the others she can at least stand to be around.
Amusingly, given how damned much Ino values her sister and family, I could see her ending up aligned with the Rats as well. Something that would make Rei skittish and wary and depressed given her own plans and desires at this time, along with Ino's own inner turmoils and issues being associated with those who hurt her big sister.
Second, there is little else I can comment on here that others have not brought up themselves, and you are doing a damned fine job with what I have seen so far. The only thing that stands out is Ino not digging for 'harmless' info regarding the summon clan her sister is associated with (like which of the rats Rei summons are complete assholes, and which are ok'ish as individuals, as an example). That just seems odd given her feelings and opinions of them. Yes, she doesn't like them, but she also knows that she can't turn Rei away from them, so I can see Ino trying (and miserably failing) to keep an eye on the more assholish ones while trying to make some inroads with some of the others she can at least stand to be around.
Amusingly, given how damned much Ino values her sister and family, I could see her ending up aligned with the Rats as well. Something that would make Rei skittish and wary and depressed given her own plans and desires at this time, along with Ino's own inner turmoils and issues being associated with those who hurt her big sister.