TheToFu
ToFu
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I found this not too long ago and read it all in one go. It's actually pretty solid for a story not written in a person's native language. Lots of props for that because that takes some skills and dedication. Honestly, idk what to think about Juane. one moment he's acting like a normal character, and the other, he's bipolar, and then he's suddenly a Sponge Bob character. The guy is honestly all over the place and I don't get why because he can be interesting without having to be cartoonish.
During the early chapters, I was really scratching my head at him, not even bothering to use his create semblance. He didn't create anything to buff his aura regeneration, or anything to buff his magic regeneration. Its clear that his body is able to store both aura and magic right. So if he was to wear a bracelet, ring or earing that restore 0.05% magic or even just 10% magic over time. That stacks over 24hrs along with it being clear that there isn't a upper limit on his storage capacity.
Also, no basic self-regeneration items for him or his teammates seem sort of like a big missing item when you can run out of medical supplies.
He's also spacing out, idk why you even made that a thing, along with the super complex items that somehow are missing the most important parts. Iron man Armor with no Ai, if he was building iron man armor quickly, there is no way that the Ai should be missing.
Also, why is he still in basic crap after how many freaking days. Like come on, he is fighting for his life and the dude is in sneakers and jeans. There is dumb, but no one should ever be that dumb.
Anyway, don't want it to seem like I didn't enjoy the story because i did. I just think that things stand out more to me because i read it all the way through. This has a lot of potential and I would like to read more.
During the early chapters, I was really scratching my head at him, not even bothering to use his create semblance. He didn't create anything to buff his aura regeneration, or anything to buff his magic regeneration. Its clear that his body is able to store both aura and magic right. So if he was to wear a bracelet, ring or earing that restore 0.05% magic or even just 10% magic over time. That stacks over 24hrs along with it being clear that there isn't a upper limit on his storage capacity.
Also, no basic self-regeneration items for him or his teammates seem sort of like a big missing item when you can run out of medical supplies.
He's also spacing out, idk why you even made that a thing, along with the super complex items that somehow are missing the most important parts. Iron man Armor with no Ai, if he was building iron man armor quickly, there is no way that the Ai should be missing.
Also, why is he still in basic crap after how many freaking days. Like come on, he is fighting for his life and the dude is in sneakers and jeans. There is dumb, but no one should ever be that dumb.
Anyway, don't want it to seem like I didn't enjoy the story because i did. I just think that things stand out more to me because i read it all the way through. This has a lot of potential and I would like to read more.