AndrewJTalon
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I wanted to accomplish a lot in a short amount of time. There are circumstances where you want to draw out a scene, use it to set a mood or set up for the future. In this case I wanted it to feel like Ozpin has a lot of stuff to cover in a short time, and so tried to capture that while providing useful information to the reader that will matter in the future.
In this case, I set up:
-More field missions for the students, which will play a key role in future chapters.
-Silverhand's relationship to the other PMCs now making up the VDF and where they will be geographically
-The findings on the Grimm/Human Hybrid and where Qrow and Isabel's story will next take them
-Ruby's Silver Eyes
-Isabel being in the know about Salem and formally joining the group
-More on Merlot's background and history and why learning more about this is important
-Some of the politics of Mistral thanks to Lionheart
-Technical aspects of the CCT.
But on the character side I also established:
-Ironwood and Silverhand's animosity, Silverhand's status as a new and unknown element
-Ironwood's paranoia about Isabel despite them being familiar
-Winter's issues with her family, at least as they relate to this situation
-Lionheart's temperament-Is it simply that he's a coward or is he trying to hamper the group under Salem's orders?
-Ozpin's mindset and how he is a manipulator but not a malicious one
-Taiyang finding his spine and standing up to Ozpin for his daughter while still being committed to the cause
-Ozpin's views on Teams RWBY and JNPR insofar as they relate to his plans.
Not much for Glynda in this scene, but it isn't very necessary. All of this is information that the audience either didn't have before or is fleshing out information they received previously while still setting up things for the future.
Not every scene needs to convey a massive amount of information, because it's not necessary to fill every scene with that. But it is best to be as efficient as possible with it and make it tie into character and make it feel natural. In all honesty I could have probably made this more fluid or maybe had Glynda help meditate things. Point is, going into this I had very clear goals about what I wanted to convey to the audience and how to go about it. The execution can always be improved though.
In this case, I set up:
-More field missions for the students, which will play a key role in future chapters.
-Silverhand's relationship to the other PMCs now making up the VDF and where they will be geographically
-The findings on the Grimm/Human Hybrid and where Qrow and Isabel's story will next take them
-Ruby's Silver Eyes
-Isabel being in the know about Salem and formally joining the group
-More on Merlot's background and history and why learning more about this is important
-Some of the politics of Mistral thanks to Lionheart
-Technical aspects of the CCT.
But on the character side I also established:
-Ironwood and Silverhand's animosity, Silverhand's status as a new and unknown element
-Ironwood's paranoia about Isabel despite them being familiar
-Winter's issues with her family, at least as they relate to this situation
-Lionheart's temperament-Is it simply that he's a coward or is he trying to hamper the group under Salem's orders?
-Ozpin's mindset and how he is a manipulator but not a malicious one
-Taiyang finding his spine and standing up to Ozpin for his daughter while still being committed to the cause
-Ozpin's views on Teams RWBY and JNPR insofar as they relate to his plans.
Not much for Glynda in this scene, but it isn't very necessary. All of this is information that the audience either didn't have before or is fleshing out information they received previously while still setting up things for the future.
Not every scene needs to convey a massive amount of information, because it's not necessary to fill every scene with that. But it is best to be as efficient as possible with it and make it tie into character and make it feel natural. In all honesty I could have probably made this more fluid or maybe had Glynda help meditate things. Point is, going into this I had very clear goals about what I wanted to convey to the audience and how to go about it. The execution can always be improved though.