Dungeon Delver Quest (Original Fantasy... again)

[Grosstoad]

[X] Bring him along, if he tries anything funny, you'll just squish him.

 

[Hangwind]

[X] Bring him along, if he tries anything funny, you'll just squish him.

 

[Sirrocco]

[X] Nah, but you should look for a partner before you head in
-[X] Du Hansard

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Who is this strange fellow of whom you speak? We know no "Du Hansard".

 

[Larekko12]

[X] Bring him along, if he tries anything funny, you'll just squish him

 

[tEN]

Du's Childhood Montage

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Sumedo Hansard looks down at the small child in her arms, blinking around at the world in wonder. She turns to her husband. "Dorasu, I've decided. Our newest child is Du."

He nods. "Curiosity is a good name for a mage."

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Du, still too young to have a gender, sits nearest her oldest brother. Fi has just been accepted to the academy two years early. "Hey, hey Fi, now that you're an adult, what's your grown up name?"

Fi makes a show of thinking about it. "Well, I thought about being Fifi," Du makes a face at this. Insightful Insight is a terrible name, and likely to make you go crazy from learning something unknowable. "But I think I'll go with Ne as my adulthood letter."

"Insightful Power, huh? You're the coolest big brother ever."

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Fine is home from the academy for the kelp bloom festival, and Du is trying, unsuccessfully, to cast the harvesting spell.

"Don't worry, little lady, you'll get it. My friend Samo Green was telling me that she was studying for years before she got her first spell to work, but once she figured it out, everything fell into place."

"But with a name like Patient Determination of course she'd take a long time and then be good!"

"Names aren't everything, and in any case, Du, doesn't your name mean eventually you'll know everything?"

Du grumbles at this, then perks up. "Wait, she? Are you gonna be Finesa Green someday?"

Fine blushes. "Stop that! We're just friends!"

"Oh yeah? What color are her scales?"

"The most beautiful sapphire with emerald highlights," Fine replies dreamily.

Du just laughs.
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The next time Du sees Fine, it is as a sister. "Hey, hey, you changed! What's Samo going to say?"

Fine blushes. "Not that it matters at all, but he doesn't mind."

"He now, huh? So when do I get to meet the future Samofi Hansard?"

"We're not like that!"

Du just laughs.

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Du is alone in the marsh on his way to the storage shed when he hears the creature. He panics, and makes it into the shed just in time. In desparation, he concentrates, focusing on the door, and on how sturdy it is. Miraculously, the door holds, and the creature leaves. Du smiles. Finally. Finally he cast his first spell. His family will be so proud of him.

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Tears run down Du's face. They were all so sad and sympathetic, but... Not a real mage, they said. He wasn't going to go, but he heard about a new tower. Maybe there, maybe Dufi Hansard could become a real mage. Or perhaps Dumo or Dure. Curious Versatility wouldn't be a bad name. Maybe even something else. It didn't matter. He had a long journey on foot to pick his adult letter. Maybe he'd even arrive female. It all depended on how he felt on the way.

 

[CptTagon]

[X] Bring him along, if he tries anything funny, you'll just squish him.

 

[tEN]

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[Kinematics]

Huh. The html code for lines didn't work and editing on my phone is a sisyphean torture, so I'll fix it when I'm on a computer.

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Don't use HTML. Use BBCode. [hr], not <hr>.

 

[tEN]

Don't use HTML. Use BBCode. [hr], not <hr>.

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Whatever. I still can't edit it properly until I'm not on mobile.

 

[Kinematics]

Time for another round of editing.

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Decision made, you turn toward the direction of the smell, your greater height pretty easily allowing you to see over the crowd, and set off for the brightly colored pavilion venting smoke.

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A minor incident of almost stepping on a pixie aside, you don't have too much trouble on the way,. mMost people around here seem to be minding their own business or focuses in their own little groups,. tThe delicious smelling pavilion is pretty big too, and it's its wide entrance is actually tall enough that you only have to duck a little to enter.

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You shake your head at the oddity,. mMagicians are weird.

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He has a lot of jewelry for a guy you notice, — lots of little glinting bracelets and rings and way too many jeweled piercings dangling from his pointy ears.

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It's not like you're trying to sneak in or something,. "After that welcome I figured I could use something to drink."

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"Well, you have come to the right place then,. yYou will find no wider selection of fine drinks here," he responds, cheerful tone never wavering,. "I admit, the welcome is a bit bracing. At least you were not one of those left smoking in the grass though, yes?"

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You nod even as your eyes scan over the selection behind him, eventually alighting on a woefully small bottle you recognize as a Black Mountain vintage,; your you're surprised a foreigner got ahold of some of that clans clan's work,. "Oh, that weird message said the tower welcomed everyone,. wWas it lying?" you ask curiously, before pointing out the bottle behind him,. "How much for that? Also, you have a menu or something?"

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"I think you will find, young lady, that fewer and fewer shopkeepers accept anything but shards for their wares," he replies,. "Of course, in my great kindness, I accept simple coin from newcomers,; consider it a friendly warning for the future. The spirits will cost you three silver,. sShould you take a seat, one of my waitresses will see you served a meal shortly."

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You grumble at the cost, but you suppose if your coins are going to become worthless, you suppose it doesn't matter.

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As you dig out the coins you also remember your manners, such as they are,. "Oh yeah, I'm Yuuka,. wWhat's your name? It's weird thinking of you as 'the elf'."

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You roll your eyes,. tThis guy lays on the salesman shtick a little thick, but he doesn't seem bad, precisely,. "If your food is as good as it smells, I guess I might be," you reply as you turn away, bottle in hand, and scan for an empty seat,. tThere are plenty of them though, so you make your way to the closest and have a seat,. tThe bench at the table groans a little under your weight, but holds just fine.

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You let out a happy sigh,; the bottle is even runed to keep it at the perfect temperature.

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Well that and the dull, empty eyes. More than a few of the customers don't seem to mind ogling them despite that. tThey serve their purpose though, and your order gets collected and delivered efficiently and without error,. yYou kinda wonder where the heck Gemos got fresh fish so far inland, but he's pretty clearly some kind of wizard, so you don't put too much thought into the matter.

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Inventory has been changed since previous iterations,. rRather than being based on strength, every character begins with ten slots, which can be modified by equipment or skills.

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Permanent items fit one to a slot,; consumables and [???] can be held five to a slot.

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The currency one has been answered, but other questions remain,. yYou suppose the obvious one to ask is Gemnus, seeing as you know he won't just blow you off, but business does look to be picking up so he's also kinda busy.

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Looking around you try to figure out who you should talk too to,. oObviously you want to ask someone who isn't a total newbie like you, but how do you tell who is and who isn't?

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Especially with elves, the difference is pretty slight compared to what you were used to.

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You squint at the figure on his shoulder,. mMaybe a pixie or something? She has the wings for it,. nNo matter, though.

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"My name is Murdan,. Murdabn Mall'eoch," he responds with an aggrieved sigh,. "Please do not give strangers odd ideas, Great Spirit."

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"No, there is not really a central authority here," he admits,. "I do believe some kingdoms tried, but, well, just yesterday I saw a noblewoman arrive with an entire platoon of guards in tow. The only survivors were herself and the captain of her guard. I suspect this place prevents any gathering of significant armed forces, though what mechanism it does so by is…"

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"... just yesterday I saw a noblewoman arrive with an entire platoon of guards in tow. The only survivors were herself and the captain of her guard." — Doesn't make sense. She arrived with an entire platoon, but also apparently only arrived with her captain? Is her captain an entire platoon? Did the platoon not survive entrance into the area? (If so, how did Murdan see them?) Did they enter the tower and not survive the trip?

"So nobody I need permission from, got it," you interrupt,. yYou feel a little bad, but you aren't here for a full course on whatever magic runs the tower.

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"I guess you must be able to as well, since nobody's taken your stuff yet,." iIt's only polite to respond to a compliment with a compliment,. Sylph laughs, and Murdan doesn't quite seem to know how to take your words,. "Right, so what's it like in the tower? How far along are people on their way to the top?"

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"As for what it is like…" he grimaces again,. "Packed with monsters,. iIt seems the first floor is largely full of undead."

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You consider it,. fFighting alone is always a bit dicey, but it's not like you have any reason to trust this guy.

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[Guile]

[X] Bring him along, if he tries anything funny, you'll just squish him.
-[X] If squishing skellies is easy, then it's no trouble letting him hide behind your non-existent skirts. He should really work on his stamina issues, though. Nobody wants a guy that can't last. (Why is Sylph giggling?)

 

[Arkeus]

-[] If squishing skellies is easy, then it's no trouble letting him hide behind your non-existent skirts. He should really work on his stamina issues, though. Nobody wants a guy that can't last. (Why is Sylph giggling?)

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Not sure I approve of innocent Yuuka

 

[Guile]

Not sure I approve of innocent Yuuka

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Well, it could just be oblivious Yuuka, who doesn't think when she says stuff, or even have effeminate elf boys on her radar.

 

[tEN]

Well, it could just be oblivious Yuuka, who doesn't think when she says stuff, or even have effeminate elf boys on her radar.

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Obviously she should have shiny scaled androgynous fish people on her radar instead, because they look like treasure.

 

[Larekko12]

Obviously she should have shiny scaled androgynous fish people on her radar instead, because they look like treasure.

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She's an oni not a dragon. Dwarfs and Pandaren Brew masters or bust.

 

[tEN]

She's an oni not a dragon. Dwarfs and Pandaren Brew masters or bust.

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Unlike a sonic screwdriver, Du can triplicate the alcohol content of liquor.

 

[Arkeus]

Sadly Lona Estellor seems firmly in the position of 'In another part with her guard captain', at least for now. Well, unless she isn't the princess talked about earlier. Honestly I would be tempted to try and grab her, but there is IC no reason to do that and actual reasons not to do that (E.G we don't know what she is capable of nor her bodyguard, and we have someone right in front of us who actually can work with us. Oh, also Oni might not be really liked by royalty except as slaves/pets).

 

[Bre Karn]

Obviously she should have shiny scaled androgynous fish people on her radar instead, because they look like treasure.

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Oh shush, you'll get your turn Let me savor this. With your write-in, (s)he might be the next one!

Honestly I do not care about splitting xp due to high party numbers by the way. Grinding Quests are boring, it's the interaction with an interesting cast that matters!

EDIT: within reason of course. Managing a whole fucking guild would be too much bookkeeping. But a team of all the yrsillar-approved chargen options? Let's do this, people!

 

[yrsillar]

Yuuka isn't particularly innocent, she just isn't really interested in foreigners that way. After all, they're so tiny.

And don't worry there'll probably be a chance to work with all the proposed characters at one point or another.

 

[Xicree]

Oh shush, you'll get your turn Let me savor this. With your write-in, (s)he might be the next one!

Honestly I do not care about splitting xp due to high party numbers by the way. Grinding Quests are boring, it's the interaction with an interesting cast that matters!

EDIT: within reason of course. Managing a whole fucking guild would be too much bookkeeping. But a team of all the yrsillar-approved chargen options? Let's do this, people!

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Actually Im thinking the gear payoff for beating tower bosses would be worth more than the XP from grinding. And whats more by killing the tower bosses first and then getting the next set of gear before other people we can then sell the old gear for large amounts.

 

[Arkeus]

Actually Im thinking the gear payoff for beating tower bosses would be worth more than the XP from grinding. And whats more by killing the tower bosses first and then getting the next set of gear before other people we can then sell the old gear for large amounts.

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If a Boss only drops one Chunk , having to kill 4+ bosses before we get our first Chunk of Deucite is going to be a right pain. So yeah, I am in it for the XP/Deucite too.

 

[mrttao]

[X] Bring him along, if he tries anything funny, you'll just squish him.

I like the guy. and we can always seperate

 

[Minion #Q]

[X] Bring him along, if he tries anything funny, you'll just squish him.

 

[Bre Karn]

Oh snap, I should have called the Ice Spirit Elsa; with a proviso that her summoning involves a ban against singing.

 

[mrttao]

Oh snap, I should have called the Ice Spirit Elsa; with a proviso that her summoning involves a ban against singing.

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Edit it in. Nobody here will complain
make an OOC note of the edit at beginning of next post to make sure everyone sees it

 

[Frakir's brother]

[X] Bring him along, if he tries anything funny, you'll just squish him.
-[X] We don't know if he'll work even mid term, but we have a couple of potions for our own stamina and a guide that's also a nuker for some of the more difficult enemies can be useful.

 

[Darkened]

[X] Bring him along, if he tries anything funny, you'll just squish him.

Edit: So, thinking about it, I'd like to aim for a smaller party. Fewer members=more XP early on which may help us get out of the rookie tier more easily.

So, what do we want?

Yuuka is both tanky and offensive, so I'd like to go without any melee for the moment.

Murden, if he works out, adds damage dealing and potentially some utility. Depending on exact skill balance, he may be able to cover general utility, but my inclination is to suspect a lot of burst right now.

Of the known character options, Linnea is probably the most healy, so she'd be my go to for a third.

If Murden fits more into utility niche than pure burst, we may want someone thievy instead. Of course, it may work to just meet a lot of people and partner with different ones in different runs. We'll probably want numbers for bossy stuff so shifting up party membership rather than slipping right into a set team might really help.

 

[tEN]

Du really is rather versatile. Adjusting a lock to be less secure is well within his abilities.

 

[Arkeus]

If Murden fits more into utility niche than pure burst, we may want someone thievy instead. Of course, it may work to just meet a lot of people and partner with different ones in different runs. We'll probably want numbers for bossy stuff so shifting up party membership rather than slipping right into a set team might really help.

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Bossy stuff has the issues to, from my understand, be the only ones to drop the bigger Deucites.... and you need those for skills over C. I don't fancy having to do the same boss 10 times just to have his Deucite drop once

 

[mrttao]

Bossy stuff has the issues to, from my understand, be the only ones to drop the bigger Deucites.... and you need those for skills over C. I don't fancy having to do the same boss 10 times just to have his Deucite drop once

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the way i see it, we are going to be clearly carrying him early on.but when we start encountering higher level boss monsters that drop bigger deucites we are going to want a proper party to defeat them

we could do early solo to gain early levels faster and then party up with someone stronger. but that leaves less time for relationship development and a bigger chance of backstab
The issue is that there is only 1 wish at the top. However, most people aren't even aiming for the top, just getting powerful and wealthy enough to be set for life