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With This Ring (Young Justice SI) (Thread Fourteen)

Discussion in 'Creative Writing' started by Mr Zoat, Jan 27, 2019.

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  1. Sockmonkey

    Sockmonkey I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    If that didn't kill the ring totally, it certainly killed it's charge.
     
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  2. Bigking321

    Bigking321 Know what you're doing yet?

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    Well...

    That's kinda unfair. Lol.
     
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  3. Handlewithcare

    Handlewithcare Versed in the lewd.

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    Damn. One New God robot and it's already close.

    If Apokolips had sent even a few gods...than they would have won here o_O
     
  4. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    If his ring is shut down, he can't shut down the boom tubes. I'd wonder if there's a risk he'll get sent to Apokolips, but it seems more likely that the robot will just try to kill him instead.
     
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  5. Vaermina

    Vaermina Experienced.

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    Yea... This is your own damn fault given you already knew this wouldn't work.
     
  6. BR549

    BR549 This is filth! FILTH!!

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    As noted, this is Apokalips doing things on the extremely cheap, for an apparent variety of reasons. I wouldn't be surprised if there's a 'we will disavow your actions' clause in play even.

    And the Boom Tubes aren't going back to Apokolips anyway - they've been booming in Alliance of the Justified members from their various bases on Earth.
     
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  7. Chojin Patriarch

    Chojin Patriarch Veteran Lurker

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    Welp, not on OL's side, then. Not that conventional weapons would do much to Finality Man. And any soldiers on the ground are likely to be down or going down with Anti-Life infections. Heck, that's probably who some of the people fighting them are. And unfortunately, they're a lot squishier than our heroes...

    Yeah, small arms fire might leave a nice little hole as it goes through (with a bigger one going out...) Cannon ammo? Not so small.

    At this point, it's practically a macro. :p

    How fast depends on...

    ...Yeah. Old OL would probably have just shredded the plane and let the pilot sort himself out. Now? The enemy is also their own hostage...

    Complete autopilot there. Gotta love how he's barely even being distracted by it.

    Huh, I was kidding when I said shredded, but that's about as clean as you could get for a kill-shot.

    Plus dodging, of course. Because those are not small, and even the molten shrapnel can probably keep the All-Piercing trait...

    Such a satisfying sound when it's on your side. When it's firing at you, though...

    Heh, so casual about losing a dinner plate-sized chunk of his body.

    Asking because you want to throw some of your own down the holes, Guy?

    After all, they have two targets, not one in their AO...

    Ah, there's the 'shred first, worry about the pilot second' reaction. :D

    Bet he's starting to get annoyed now.

    But of a scramble, but well done.

    ...For now. Best to be on your guard, though.

    Guy, you really need to get your own Purple Healing Ray gun...

    Uh-oh. looks like Finality Man's buffing himself this time.

    ...Gotta admit, that would look amazing to see, if you weren't on the receiving end. :eek:

    Heh. Always amusing when technology clashes like that.

    And with enough speed, it doubles as armour-piercing too.

    Let's hope somethign works before he gets to the really big guns. You know, the kind that leaves craters visible from space?

    ...Because it might come down to that level of firepower.

    Huh, that went through nearly unimpeded. Maybe playing overwatch and fire-support is not the way to go here. Time to take a leaf out of Doomguy's book... And rip and tear.

    Then again, why work up a sweat when you have Construct Lanterns to do that for you? :p

    Oh, that's just cheating!

    Let's hope it just disrupted his focus with a little Black, rather than draining the Rings outright. Either way, OL is going to have to work a little harder, now that Finality Man's taken a more personal interest in him. Despite the risks, this might be a good time to push your Orange Light skills just a bit harder, and start tapping the light direct...


    One Line Break too many?
     
  8. Bigking321

    Bigking321 Know what you're doing yet?

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    Actually, I think it was working. By having the absorbed person drain instead of doing it himself he got rid of the anti life feedback that screwed him up before.

    But, then the robot pulled this new power out...
     
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  9. Agumentic

    Agumentic Not too sore, are you?

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    Damn, no wonder GLC-Apokolyps war turned into a total slaughter. Finality Man is not exactly standard issue, but it is also not the most powerful thing Darkseid can put on the field, and it handles two of like top-10 Lanterns in the galaxy without much problems.
     
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  10. Vaermina

    Vaermina Experienced.

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    This isn't a new power, it's the exact same one it's been using this entire time just applied directly instead of indirectly.

    Also, given the speed with which it popped LePaul would have run out of construct lanterns before it hit even the half way point power wise.
     
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  11. thebishop8

    thebishop8 Umm, ackchyually...

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    "Disavow your actions" doesn't seem like an attitude Darkseid would take.

    Boom tubes can open to almost anywhere the user wants them to go.
     
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  12. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    That's intentional.
    Thank you, corrected.
     
  13. Lord Ernest

    Lord Ernest At the End...

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    I think the Illustres' cleverness is working against him a bit. He has so many options and clever weapons that he's unaccostumed to just going hard and unrelentless.

    See how his crumbler shell or cold gun didn't work but his construct battering ram did better? Why not keep hammering Finality Man? Or really bring the maximum power of his energy pulse with the desire to totally destroy this thing? And I don't know how much charge his graviton deflator takes but wouldn't it be better to keep it on? Like when a fight against another Lantern happens, both Lanterns usually implement and keep active their anti-FTL measures for more or less the same reason.

    I think he may need more practice outpowering an enemy, besides just out thinking it. Sometimes it's necessary. Especislly when an enemy can, apparently, be more clever and out think you.
     
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  14. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    It's a gun. He points it at the aperture and fires it. I appreciate that wasn't clear.
     
  15. Bud-E

    Bud-E Stand up so I can push you down!

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  16. moralrelativity

    moralrelativity Recovering pendant.

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    plans -> planes
     
  17. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    Thank you, corrected.
     
  18. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    "evacuated, shrapnel"

    They probably won't listen.
     
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  19. Mr Zoat

    Mr Zoat Dedicated ragequitter

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    I think that's okay.
     
  20. Windona

    Windona Beetle Queen of Crackshipping

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    Oh wow, this does establish Apokalypse as a huge threat. All of this done to the Earth? Chances are even if the heroes completely win this, Darkseid hasn't really lost anything he had before Paul showed up on E16.

    Though yup, like in the KOTOR boss fight the enemy can't drain if there's nothing to drain.
     
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  21. Darko

    Darko Connoisseur.

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    Unless they somehow manage to get rid of the piece stuck in Bruno, so Darkseid could be weakened.
     
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  22. Coda

    Coda I trust you know where the happy button is?

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    Uh... is OL still packing a backup ring?
     
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  23. m_d

    m_d Fascinated by storytelling

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    Something that occurred to me that may or may not end up relevant here. So, it's been established that a purple healing ray gun requires an active thaumosphere, but I don't think that specifics about what other characteristics that thaumosphere needs to have in order for it to work properly have been laid out. For other magic effects, various characters have spoken about limitations to their utility in differing magic environments. I wonder whether the influence of whatever New God tech is being used on Earth's thaumosphere will affect the functioning of the purple ray guns. And if so, whether it'll be obvious or instead insidious.

    Like, I still remember being horrified at the warped healing in the Ravenloft D&D setting where clerics who had been dropped into it from other settings, whose connections to their gods were thereby disrupted, could heal people as normal, and it would look fine initially, but over time the healed people would go very wrong. If I recall correctly, in the example I read, a healed hand slowly became a venomous snake that tried to bite its owner, and a healed back grew an evil miniature second humanoid head. *shivers*
     
  24. MadMonkMash

    MadMonkMash Your first time is always over so quickly, isn't it?

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    So I've been a lurker in the with this ring fandom for a while now and up until this point i had a feeling that Paul was doing something innately wrong with the way hes been using his ring and i hadn't been able to put my finger on what it actually was but i think I've figured it out. now I'm a consumer of more old fashioned comic media and of course Mr Zoat holds all control of the setting but it seems to me that the way Paul is using his ring is a rather round about way. Historically green lanterns have been able to create esoteric materials and effects purely through the power of the light they wield (A rather famous version being the ability to recreate the aspects of kryptonite that make it toxic to kryptonians) so if that works in this universe (which it might not) why isn't Paul just strait up using his lantern light in place of the original stuff. By this i mean when he uses the healing ray why not just make his constructs produce the same stuff, make his constructs take on the stuff that makes crumbler rounds work(Which he might have and i just can't remember). A prime example of this is his use of rail gun constructs which while useful for the angel rounds i just cant see being more effective than just making his ring shoot out pure energy shots which would probably be faster and creates less points of failure.

    Thank you for coming to my ted talk.


    And of course i could be completely wrong and non of this works this way in Mr Zoats universe ;)
     
  25. Bud-E

    Bud-E Stand up so I can push you down!

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    I know Zoat wanted his Lanterns to be less OP so some comic-accurate stuff Lanterns can't do in this fic. The prime example that comes to mind is Lanterns have been shown the ability to block omega beams with normal constructs in this fic omega beams only stop when they've hit a living target. Also, some things Lanterns can do in comics are just ridiculous time travel, universal teleportation, the ability to move and destroy planets like Golden Age Superman the rings could do whatever the author wanted them to do.
     
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  26. RoninSword

    RoninSword Sky God

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    In terms of the railguns, its less the railguns themselves and more the type of ammunition that he uses. Easier to create a railgun that shoots a crumbler round then just using the ring to try and project a crumbler round or its effect at its target.
     
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  27. BR549

    BR549 This is filth! FILTH!!

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    As noted elsewhere - this is being done on the cheap, apparently as a distraction for going against the Reach.

    Darkseid, being Tyrrany, has to be SEEN performing tyrannical actions in his name, or suffer a metaphysical nerf. He isn't here and Mannheim himself has been the only person invoved invoking Darkseid's name - even Finality Man is invoking Mannheim's. So Mannheim gets to take the credit - or the nerfbat.

    This is obviously a "side job" by Apokalypsian standards; if it works, that's great, if it doesn't, Mannheim is going to be left swinging in the breeze.

    Yes, but right now aside from delivering Finality Man and the batch of expendable Insectoids, this seems to be being limited to Earth.
     
  28. xSieg

    xSieg Getting out there.

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    Infinity Man is top dog for New Gods, unless YJ changed it as I haven't watched it. While he's no Yuga Khan, Darkseid or Izaya, I'd imagine he's a match for Orion and he's got very good mojo in-universe.
     
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    Mr Zoat

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    Yesterday, that would have been a sound move. But right now Guy's down to that stupid Halla pistol and a personal force field while I've actually got some reasonable fire power. No way to stop a boom tube, but if it-

    The robot raises its hands, red glow slowly coalescing in its palms.

    -actually attacks-.

    "Plot flight path, engage."

    My armour accelerates, crumbler gauntlets going live as I fly arms-first into its right palm! It-. Ah! That's what happened! It loses containment immediately, the effect feeding back into wherever it's getting this energy from. My armour gets… Ah, not used to reading these alerts, a little abraded, which suggest that the red stuff needs to be fully 'shaped' in order to have the maximum effect.

    And now I'm past the robot, its now limp hand knocked aside and noticeably not building up the red stuff. The robot turns slowly around to face me, shielding its still-glowing right hand with the mass of its body as it does so. Unfortunately for it, I still had the design for the smart missile system I designed for Artemis a few years ago in my database and stuck a slightly repurposed version on this armour when I gave it firepower. And since whatever shield it had a minute ago doesn't seem to be working now…

    "Fire volley one."

    The ejection system vomits twelve missiles directly upwards in rapid succession, sending them arcing up over the robot. At the apex of their curve the cases pop open, submunitions deploying, simple guidance systems networking with my armour's computers and aiming themselves down before activating their boosters. The robot raises its right hand just a little too slowly, the blast of red energy hitting the oncoming swarm only after they spread out from their initial cluster. The rest strike home, destabilising the red energy around the right hand-

    There's a small burst of energy as something inside it overloads and the hand goes slack.

    -and hitting the face on the off chance that it was planning on using omega beams. No, looks like it wasn't, but the face is more than a little abraded.

    My armour's scanners show no Justifiers in the area, and if something's happened to its boom tube system then it can't call more-

    Space around its chest twists, the robot appearing to bend into a spiral for a moment before vanishing.

    -in.

    My rings light back up-.

    "Find Guy."

    I get a response and fly, coming to a halt just above him as he awkwardly plays a purple healing ray over his wounds, an empty vial of healing potion on the ground next to him.

    "Robot retreated. Need a hand?"

    "Nah, I'm-. Nearly good."

    "Healing ray's not great on complex internal injuries." I deploy a healing tube flask of my own and offer it to him. "Here."

    "Thanks."

    He takes it with his left hand, screws the cap and downs it.

    "You got all the bullet fragments out, right? Because-."

    He nods his head towards a small pile of brass next to him.

    "How long 'till it comes back?"

    "Don’t know. Given the way it was healing, it could be back in seconds if it can find some Justifiers to drain to death."

    He makes an expression of distaste. "Yeah. Spotted that. Y'got any idea how?"

    "It's higher up the hierarchy than they are. Their lives are lived to serve it. We're basically surrounded by a high-end spell right now, so there's a worldwide conductive medium."

    He stands, poking his former wounds with his right hand to make sure they're gone.

    "We can use that, right?"

    "Bloody hope so. What was that you did to its hand?"

    "Old technique. Supposed to stop th' universe changin' if you've got the will for it. Think I nearly did." He thinks for a moment. "You sure we can't use th' embodiments?"

    "'Sure'? No. 'Willing to risk it'..?"

    "Yeah, I getcha." He generates a phone construct and holds it to his right ear. "Hey babe. Yeah, it's gone. Ah…Think so. I'll check, but-."

    He makes eye contact with me.

    "You got those pilots, right?"

    "Lined up on a bench on the shore."

    "Right. You get that? No, just one. They shot themselves when they were disabled. Yeah, we'll-. 'kay. I love you. No no, that ain't-. I jus' wanna say it, y'know? 'cause I do. Okay. Bye."

    "Are you affected by the Anti-Life broadcast?"

    He nods. "Yeah. Kinda? I mean, I hear it, an' it makes me think abowd stuff I don't wanna, but it ain't stoppin' me. You?"

    "I heard the robot, but apart from that?" I shake my head. "If it wasn't for everyone else reacting I wouldn't even know it was happening. I thought it was the enlightenment, but if you're still affected that can't be it."

    "Yeah. Weird." He brings his right hand up to his chest, laying his left hand over it. "This is gunna feel a little weird."

    "What else is new?"

    He glows for a moment, not particularly bright but certainly intense. Then a wave of green shoots out in all directions and I feel confident, certain, ready to take on a legion of those robots and smash them to pieces.

    "Yeah." His eyes are glowing green. "I ain't no Ion, but I'll do fer now." He rises into the air. "I need ta hit th' airbase. You okay tawkin' with th' prisoners?"

    Tracking… The Justifier I freed is now on his feet and sort of wandering around. The pilots on the bench are staying where they were with their heads in their hands. "Can do."

    He takes off at speed, heading inland. Right, now to-.

    "L-lantern! Lantern!"

    I fly over to the liberated Justifier as he waves-.

    "Mister Wasem?"

    Recruiter for the Gotham branch of the Congregation. I've spoken to him a couple of times…

    "Oh God, Oh God. I…" His right hand clasps the side of his face. "What happened to me?"

    "Anti-Life. The Alliance was a cover for an alien take-over. Talk to me. What happened? Tell me everything."
     
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    Saved by Guy, LePaul is never going to live this down.
     
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